Strangely fantastic.
I love your Wilson and Clarence too.
Thank you for sharing!
xLx

This is awesome!

I can't read this. It's so badly executed that it's distracting. Is this the reaction you want from readers? (I doubt it, because your attempt at dark and 'edgy' subject matter is intended to evoke shock from your audience, so I assume you want them to actually be able to read it.) Gimmicky prose isn't art, it doesn't make you avant garde. It makes you sound illiterate. Stop it.

Wow dude...you like totally blew my mind. This is so heavy.

I find it interesting that after Panda, there is a sudden influx of these kind of reviews. Not saying anything--directly--but it is curious.

I hope you don't pay attention to that. Concrit is fine but it seems excessive to keep on with 'shame on you' and stuff. I can tell you put a lot of work into this, and tie. I thought it was good, personally.

If I were you, I might take off the anon (I know but...). At least they'd have to identify themselves.

Best of luck to you.

This is worse than Twilight. No redeeming qualities and riddled with wrong punctuation marks. No wait, I take that back. At least Twilight has some sort of plot, as stupid and convoluted as it is. This is just a big orgy of drama, idiocy and bad characterization.

Fanwits who like this are worse than Twihards.

Man, this sucks!

This fic is an absolute piece of **. Bad characterization, incredibly bad writing, spelling and grammatical mistakes. What the hell is wrong with you, posting crap like this? You should be ashamed of yourself.

I promised a few LJ users that I would send you the review I did on your story 'Contract'. I am new to House fandom, and this is the first novel-length fic I read. I thought since it is supposed to be one of the most popular House fics, that I would enjoy it. Normally I enjoy reading my favorite characters being tortured or abused. But for some reason, it didn't seem right for House. The torture seemed to be a little over-the-top, and the mental effects it had on him after, portraying him as very child-like, just disturbed me. I did finish the whole thing, though. I always admire authors who can write long, detailed fics. Might I suggest though, that you have someone beta-read this, and re-post it? I noticed quite a lot of punctuation mistakes, some mis-spelled words, or words used out of the proper context. Otherwise, thank you for adding something so many people enjoy to the fandom!
Oh, and I was pretty much **-kicked out of an LJ community because everyone there seemed to be a huge fan of your work, and I got about 50 comments, most of which were very rude, flaming remarks about how much of a bully I was for posting a review on a public community. I apologize if that idea upset you, but I am used to seeing it done in other fandoms. Besides, the mod deleted my post before I was able to defend my right to my opinion, and reply to the comments where I received death-threats and was called a ** and a **. The particular user that posted comments in HUGE BOLD TEXT stating that I had no right to bash her favorite authors or her 'fanpeoples' and I was a ** and deserved to die, and I should leave the fandom immediately, well, she deleted her LJ and I am darn sure is starting a clean one so she will not have the 'strike' she earned and deserves in the house_wilson comm, and will not be called-out on her comments. It must be nice to be able to start fresh and not take responsibility for her actions like that.
I am not going to delete my LJ or stop reviewing fanfic. I have had this happen to me more times than I care to admit, where a community mod took the side of everyone who called me names and told me to **-off, and then deletes my post 30 seconds after telling me to do so "within a reasonable amount of time", and not giving me a single chance to respond to any of the comments. I apparently received a 'strike' also, because I am I guess not allowed to defend myself to all those hateful people, and I did not use any harsh language, or call anyone names, I just answered questions truthfully and tried to explain why I made a review that apparently nobody has ever seen such a thing done before. I do not have the luxury however of deleting my LJ and erasing my 'strike' like some people do.
I hope you are proud of your fan-base, they are obviously so very loyal and will fight to the death for their favorite author!

Thanks a lot for writing this story! The interesting thing was that first I read Exigencies and only later I found out about The Contract.

I should have thanked you a year ago when I was still more House and Wilson fan. Your story encouraged me to write one of my own, but mine is about House and Chase friendship.

So thanks again for such a great and strong work!

Normally I have a very strong stomach, but this was the most painful story I've ever read. It gave me the creeps and still does. I just saw so many follow-up-stories of this one and gave it the second try... The first one didn't come as far as the 2/3 of the Chapter 1.

I'll have nightmares this night... Chapeau!

Jesus Christ! You pile on the hurt like it's nothing. Where's the comfort? I know, I read the genre and it's not hurt/comfort. But how can you stand writing this stuff?
It's wonderfully written and heartwrenching. But boy do I need some comfort now. If nothing appears in the next chapter I'll have to stop reading. Can't bear it. Please please get Wilson back into the story!

This is . . . Jesus, I don't even know what this is. Fear. Despair, hopelessness - absolute, pure, unmarred despair. I was truly convinced that he would spend the rest of his life trapped in that little room, being starved and raped and beaten and frozen . . . and it was horrible. I was on the verge of tears the entire time, but I was literally afraid to cry. I hardly slept the night after I finished it, and the next morning my mind just kept wandering back to that cell.

This was not the most beautifully written prose I have ever read. This was not the most elegantly structured plot I've ever seen. It wasn't even the best characterization of these characters. But for sheer, visceral, RAW emotion? I am a student of English literature, and I have spent the past several years reading what I thought were the greatest books ever written. I have not reacted to any of them the way I reacted to this.

Thank you. So much.

I first read this when I was about twelve. I was in early college (I still am) and I had read language (can you say Creative Writing essays?) and I knew about violence and rape.
But I wasn't able to understand it. I needed clarifying. But, after reading Metamorphosis and The Jungle, I was able to understand it, finally. And I was able to understand the magnitude of it.
If you changed the named of the characters you could make a book. Seriously. I read loved this story after I learned to understand it, and I like to spend a bit of time figuring out where the deleted scenes fit in, and switching around pieces. It's like this story is a puzzle we need to figure out, and that just really adds to the fun.
Thanks so much for writing this!

Okay, I've read much more graphic stuff which made seeing House suffer a lot harder to bear. What irks me very much, tough, is that Wilson is giving in so easily. He would have insisted on admitting House after he broke down in the clinic for at least one night in the hospital, including a full body exam, AT THE LATEST! House does not do nervous break-downs! No f*ing way could he have talked himself out of this one in front of Wilson (or Cuddy, for that matter, who remains strangely detached here; very ooc)

Never EVER would Wilson buy the crap about House not needing his friendship and he also wouldn't break his cane. Furthermore, several months of that kind of abuse would break House. Despite everything, he's a very sensitive person. He wouldn't be able to function AT ALL!

Uhm, I'm sorry, but... the scene were Cuddy tells House he has to do full-time clinic and sit in front of her office every free minute he has is just... so OOC on both ends that I can't bear it. Cuddy is a smart, compassionate woman who loves House very deeply and she's also one of the people who knows him best. She'd never allow him to leave her office without finding out what this is all about. She's not a blind slave driver.

...No. okay. uhm... I've read a little more than half of this now and I am very sorry to tell you that in my personal opinion you don't get the characters of "House MD" at all. I don't claim to have a firm grasp of them, either, but a fanfic only makes sense when you have a concept and put the characters into a certain environment or situation to see how they would react. It's possible to set certain "landmarks" but generally, the characters act on their own once they are let of their leash throughout the story, finding their way to cope with whatever you confront them with and that's what makes fanfiction interesting: Using the characters as lab rats for your personal experiment. What happens here is not at all how any of them would act in this kind of situation, but rather how YOU would like them to react for dramatic effect or whatever, effectively defeating the purpose of a fanciction as stated above.
If I read fanfic, I want to read about the characters I love, not some dummies that happen to look like them.

Look, I usually don't give negative feedback. I at least try to make it constructive criticism. Please try not to be mad at me. I know you put a lot of work in this piece (just look at the length of it!) and I'm not saying that you generally are a bad writer. Your style is good, better than most! But it would serve you much better if you worked with original characters.

heidi