Its...Unique. But I sorta like it! Update soon please!

I am begging you! Please keep this story going. it is awesome...I will cry hard if you will let it end this way!
Go on!

I liked it and I hope you countune

OOh, I hope you update. Do you know how HARD it is to find Artemis/Hermione fics? I love the dynamic between them, they're pretty well matched.

Update, please!
~M

Go on with this! I really like it...intresting pairing. I have never thought of them. Well, I'm waiting for the next update!
Come on!
(Excuse my grammar, I'm german)

I like the story! It's quite interesting to see Hermione in her regular environment. But don't you think the kiss was kinda rushed? They had just met after all... Still! I like the story! But how come you haven't updated? UPDATE!

Interesting. Kinda fast though, don't you think?

you gotta update this. i wanna know why hermione is running away. mmk?

very nice... i liked the ship and the way you write it. happaned a little too fast, though:)

Good work. There's very few mistakes and it is self-obvious that you've worked consciously on this one, so congrats for restoring my trust in the Pit :P

However, I have a few questions about the timeframe of this story. For Hermione, I presume it's after Hogwarts' seventh year and the final battle with Voldemort and all that. I won't get much into that, since you've already said there will be backstory. But regarding Artemis, I think I see him having only experienced First Book, as his personality did start changing a lot after that. Surely, he's not quite the people's person, but at the age of fourteen he was already developing his social skills consciously (as well as considering the possibility of building up himself physically after [spoiler], but that's another story). In your story, he feels a little stressed as if this was his first social encounter after his complete isolation, and it gives him a bit of a false image to the reader for the reasons I already stated, aside from the fact that he looks slightly like his former twelve-year-old. Also (I'm not really sure about this) but I think they're not the same age - not that it matters greatly, though.

The kiss scene was too rushed. They have just met, and none of the characters is the physically-impulsive one. It is very likely that they impressed each other with their respective intellects, but from that to an impulsive kiss there's a very long and implausible way.

Do continue with your work. It's good so far, and if you manage to make Artemis and Hermione a bit more in character, it will be better.

Very nice character work here... Not often that people can make an interesting chapter that's mostly just two characters talking with each other, but you pull it off well.

In terms of suggestions: I know we don't have the whole backstory yet at the moment, but the kiss just really didn't work for me. It's just not the kind of thing I see either of their characters doing, and especially not one who's supposed to be emotionally wounded from losing someone she loved.

Other than that, though, I thought they were all quite well in character--something that's especially impressive given that *both* of them are "out of their element". Even without having access to as many of the old-standby plot elements and aspects of their environment that authors can usually use to score cheap "in-character points" off of, you make them recognizably themselves--which is a very impressive feat of characterization.

Hope to read more of this!

hey! nice work! i really liked it. very well written.
my only concern was...wasn't the kiss a bit rushed? i mean, they've only just met. i picture the two of them, as intelligent and wary as we know them to be, to try to get to know each other a little better first. especially artemis, who is obsessed with keeping his guard up. but otherwise, very good. i'd like to see how it goes.