Reviews for Bucephalus Stolen!

Reviews For: Bucephalus Stolen!

Atsu Tenshi 2006-02-18 ch 1,	abuseI love your story! The horses point of view is great! I would be happy is there is a continution of this but sadly, there's 'the end' right below the story. I especially love on how Bucephalus potrayed Alexander and Hephaistion's relationship especially with those names, 'The Golden One' and 'Steadfast Friend'. I amused about the 'strange rolling game'. I never imagined horse would think of that ::laughs:: It also amused me to no end when Cartos said, "Why can't they stick to pure mountain water as we do?" Just that you have to do something with your paragraphs. Some readers might found it annoying (including myself). I would stop reading by the third line but I told myself this might just worth the time. And it was! But still, you need to tweak something with the paragraph or other readers (who especially judge through the appearance of the story rather than the plot itself) will be missing such great story as yours. Btw, keep up the good work! I love it so much!
Fredericka 2006-02-17 ch 1,	abuseDitto for comments by Coral and Moon. Being a Texas cowgirl who was on a horse before she could walk and has had a lifelong association with the creatures, I especially appreciated your clever way of describing Alexander’s self-imposed exile in Illyria. I think, if horses could speak, they would express much of the bewilderment you describe: Why that “rolling around game” when there’s no lovely dust or mud with which to coat themselves? And eating flesh? Great Zeus! might some humans eat us?!! Having Bucephalus speak in the idiom of the era added further credibility to your excellent story. Sincerely hope you’ll post another soon. Fredericka
CoralDawn 2006-02-16 ch 1,	abuseI enjoyed this highly unusual and wonderful perspective from Bucephalus, Castor and even Peritas! You painted such a delightful picture of the five friends in that idyllic Illyrian setting. This really sums it up: "Winter is coming. It will be long and hard - but it doesn't matter as long as we are all friends and together." Yes, indeed. Though banished from Pella, and living in a forest, they are as happy as can be! The animal friends know of the love between the Golden One and his True Friend (including, as Moon pointed out, the "rolling around" that brings great pleasure!) I enjoyed the fact that Castor was wise and prudent just like his master. Hephaistion, while Bucephalus is bold and inquisitive and apt to get into trouble! Poor Peritas feeling ashamed because he was enjoying a good nap after roasted wild boar when the bad things happened! I am not sure whether you lost all formatting while uploading this story. Paragraphs would really help, especially when there are breaks in time, and POVs between the two horses.
moon71 2006-02-16 ch 1,	abuseI really, really enjoyed this story - it was such fun! A story from Bucephalus' point of view is so original and you handled it very convincingly. I loved the description of his early life and the names he gives to the human beings around him. It was also charming the way you managed to capture the relationship between Alexander and Hephaestion while hardly ever mentioning either by name (and I loved the "rolling around game.") There were so many nice images and little details too. The only criticism I have (and it's a very small one) is that you should split your story up into paragraphs as it makes it easier to read - it didn't put me off enjoying it, though. I printed it off during my lunch break and read it as I had my sandwich and it was a real pleasure. You have a entertaining and fluid style. Please continue!

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