waitwait. im pretty sure it was a Mary Sue...XD Mary Jane...that a drug silly. -smacks forehead- but yeah. sorry if my last reveiw was harsh, just trying to be honest.

The story line you have here is a great idea and I love the skateboarding, but you made Kagome what people call a Mary Jane...or something like that...She's too perfect. She skateboards, she horse rides, she plays instruments, she sings, her father died, she this and that which all draws attention to her and makes her look perfect and amazing or whatever. The way you made her cry at like the simplest things was sorta...weirdish. I dont know. I like the idea, but I didnt like how you wrote it, sorry. I couldnt even get through it. I got to where she started showing him the letters or whatever and I just couldnt finish this story. Sorry to say, but it pretty much sucks.

that was a nice oneshot the kid sounded kawaii too lol

That was amazing! I loved it! Could you give me some ideas for a story for me to write? You are a natural!

so good!

Nice story can you make a sequel please thank's

This was very cute but also very juicy. lol. Good work lol.

i luv it

this was great keep writing u have a gift that should be shared

aw i luv it so awesome and sweet

That story was great! Keep writing more!

it was so AW

i love this story!! the beginning was awsome, but i would have ended it a little differently, say.. kagome not getting pregnant?? but all and all i really loved it!!

AW!

Ending was kinda corny, but other than that. . . . . . You're really good. I think.