It was very good! Especially for a first attempt in English. I did catch an error, though. "For some reason, he felt that anyone but him should eat Natsuo’s cooking." The sentence afterward contradicts this staement, and I think it was supposed to be "For some reason, he felt that no one but him should eat Natsuo’s cooking."

I love this fic!! :) So cute! ^^

this is the first Natsou and Youji fic i have ever read...it was good. they are lucky they cant feel pain i burned myself in the shower this morning and i have ugly scares on my legs from the hot water. :(

XD HAHA! SO AWESOME! LUVED IT! And also, don't worry about the spelling, it was pretty good. Just a few minor details, but you wouldn't be able to tell that this was your first time writing in english! Great job! Keep it up! ^^

aww, how cute.

wow... you know what? it could've done better with a--oh, wait. i get the feeling that my 'rents won't like the following words...

but you know what i mean, right? i just love zero (THIS zero, not the girls)!

-potatoes-

XD Aw! That was..I don't know, cute? Abit of mistakes, but it was relly read-able and sweet. :D You should continue, even if this is a one-shot. Lemon! Lemon! Lemon!

:gives even bigger smile:

HA! i win!

Wa~~ *_*

Very cute~~ I loved it...If I tell you the truth, I read this fic some time ago, but as I wasn't registered, I didn't comment. XDD
But now I have to tell you that this fic is really good. You should keep writing ^_~

It's really cute!
Me likey a lot. ^^

that was cute! very good for a first fic in english!

I love them. Too cute!

It's good..
I want to know what's goign to happen next..
of course I can imagin.. but to read it.. mm

"“Great” Natsuo smiled “Get your ** inside, I won’t bring it to you.”"

I honestly can't see Natsuo using language like that. Maybe Kouya and the other girl, but not him. But other than that, I really like this story. Awesome job.

Roh mais c'est trop choupi *o* *adore loveless*. Maintenant faut que tu la traduise en français *pok pok*...
Dit tu veux pas écrire une fic SoubiXRitsuka *nyeux a la bambi* hein dit?
En tout cas je trouve ce couple trop mignon (même si aucun ne bas le SobiXRitsuka ^^).
Gros Bisous ^^
Tsuki-chan

PS: Pour répondre tu connais mon adresse email lol ^^