Okay, I'm no longer in a coma and you wouldn't believe the number of stories I have to review to catch up on what I've missed. But I'd like to stretch my fingers with your wonderful tale.

For a one shot the story premise is nice. It frames the people and the family quite nicely, Jessie is the kinder of the two, Race is over-protective, and Jonny is a jerk. And their interactions were wonderful.

I'm curious as to their ages however, though changes in the timeline are common in fanfictions there seem to be a few discrepencies that could take away from the full effect. Most of the dialogue seemed childish at best. Jessie was less a protector as a small girl who was scared for a cute kitten. However you mentioned Hadji going to Bangalore which didn't happen until a little later in the series. Not to mention the use of the Hoverboard. So if they were older teenagers the dialogue takes away from more than adds to their development.

I notice only two or three typos tops, so that's a great sign.

One thing however is that from a third-person perspective you are given a somewhat omnipotent view of the world however as the Narrator you also continued to call the cat a "He" rather than an "it" taking away from some of the wonder and cuteness of the gender identification scene. Although I can't see Jonny being such a sissy about a simple gender identification of a cat. Seems...odd.

But these are all my personal perspectives. You're a wonderful writer, a great story teller, and your ability to define your characters and their surroundings, not to mention actions, gives you a great advantage on this site. Maybe I'll start reading more. Thank you for posting and giving me a chance to review some more. It's greatly appreciated.

nice, but its been really ahile 8-9 yrs when i last saw tht cartoon and i dont remember the character's personalitties anyway it was good