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| Natsuo -ZERO Male Fighter- 2006-02-26 ch 7,  | abuseplease update i love this story i must know what happens next |
| TheDarkAngel101 2006-02-25 ch 7, | abuseThough this story was short I think it was good! So you should make a sequel! |
| casui 2006-02-23 ch 7, | abuseAw the story's over so quickly! ;_; -Yea, a sequel would be really good! ^^ -Sorryz that this review is very short, busy at the moment. -Good story! -KEEP WRITING! -Ja,casui |
| WildfireDreams 2006-02-21 ch 6, | abuseInteresting, but your chapters need a little more meat on them. |
| casui 2006-02-20 ch 6, | abuseWait,...I'm confused! They just walked into a nearby alley and she just stood there as Edward until he came by? ?_?! -That was a very fast mission...*shrug* ^^ SHe did pretty well for her first mission. ^.^! Please make the next chappie longer! -UPDATE SOON! KEEP WRITING! -Ja,casui |
| casui 2006-02-19 ch 5, | abuse*reads clue* O_O She needs to seduce Scar or suduce >what's suduce mean?. |
| darklover 2006-02-18 ch 4, | abuseWrite more! |
| casui 2006-02-18 ch 4, | abuseIsabella made it and she's now the changing alchemist who can change herself into items and animals! ^^ -Interesting chapter, Isabella's determination is very high! ^^ She;s just like her parents! ^^ -Sorry for short review, ^^ thank you for the spotlight! -UPDATE SOON! KEEP WRITING! -Ja,casui |
| eclipsestardust92 2006-02-17 ch 1, | abuseOMG! u r so cool! i |
| Arie Under Presure 2006-02-17 ch 3, | abusehey! Your stories are very good, but only one thing is wrong: you chapters are WAY to short. It's like only one thing is happening in a 30 second time space. Your sentaces seem cramped, which make your writing suffer. Try lengthing your sentances with discriptive adjective, words, and verbs. That should make your story, longer, less cramped and more interesting Keep it up! ~Liquid Earth |
| Heaven's Grace aka KTH 2006-02-17 ch 3, | abusealthough its about roy and riza its good although its short |
| casui 2006-02-17 ch 3, | abuse^^ This sounds so good! -Wow, I can actually imagine what Isabella looks like. >.< -Why don't Roy and Riza want their child to learn alchemy? ?_? -Will she pass? ^^ Please update soon! But please make the next chappie longer, please! -UPDATE SOON! KEEP WRITING! -Ja,casui |
| casui 2006-02-17 ch 1, | abuseOmg! This story sounds mad good! LOL- When Ed said "they were busy" when he was in Resembol. ^^ THis sounds like an intresting and really good story! -^^ TRIPLE-UPDATE >3 chaps! |