I guess I liked it. What grade did you get on it? lol

This is a very good story, though when you say things like "lets form a raid" or "where tanks like warriors tended to hang out while waiting to go into a battleground", it makes the story seem... unnatural. You should say things like "lets gather some warriors to help us" or (for the part about the Military Ward "where the tough and ruthless dawdled and were notorius for imposing moch-battles upon one another". Yea, that kind of talk is in the game, but this is literature, and people who have never played World of Warcraft will not know what you are talking about when you say things like "a raid" or "tanks like warriors". Other than that, your story is great! Though, the ending is very short, like you were building up to the climax and then it was just a few paragraphs. This is a great one-shot story... keep up the good work!