Fantastic story. I like it that Jack ended up with Diane. Although Audrey became more bearable during the fourth season I always thought Diane was good for Jack. Nice to read this alternate outcoming. Keep up the good writing.

Tsk, Tsk. The first 4 chapters were great but, man, when it came to Jack and Audrey breaking up, it was a no-go for me. I quickly scanned the next chapter and um... I'll stop there. I love all of you other fanfics this one just wasn't my type.

good...except i'm not really a jack/diane fan... more of a audrey/jack fan... i wonder if she's dead or not...hm!

I loved the end.
Well written!

Great story - although I'm an Audrey-Jack shipper all the way, I still enjoyed reading it!

This is really well written. It's a nice different ersion of how things could have turned out!
I am a huge Jack and Audrey fan, and think they should be together!

This was a wonderful ending. I hadn’t really thought much of Jack and Diane before reading this story, but you made me really like the idea of them together. On a more frivolous note, I also love the idea of Jack preferring fancy nightgowns! It’s nice to see Jack find happiness and peace in your story, especially since it doesn’t seem like he ever will on the show. I was also happy that Diane found contentment and security in who she was, rather than comparing herself to Audrey as she had done in the previous chapters. It truly was a fairytale ending for her.

It was great to see everybody else happy too, including Bill and Audrey (who’s hopefully no longer a disaster magnet for my dear Bill’s sake). I loved the CTU/Division Christmas party! Curtis standing near the exits and Chloe talking about sending an interagency bulletin were too funny! I sometimes wonder what a CTU social event would be like (yes, I think about these things and yes, I have no life). I can just imagine Jack vs. Curtis in musical chairs, Audrey getting drunk on two cups of eggnog, and Bill and Chloe horrified at being caught under the mistletoe. But anyway, I really loved this story. Your writing is beautiful and expressive as always. I enjoyed reading it very much and will try to read more of your other stories soon!

What a sweet and beautiful chapter! I’m so happy that you gave Jack and Diane (and Derek) a happy ending! (I still have to read the final chapter, but I’m just assuming!) I was particularly happy for Diane. I love the idea of her moving to a nicer neighborhood, sending Derek to a good school, and pursuing her dream of finishing her degree. I was also impressed with Derek. After what he had gone through that day, I really could see him growing up a lot. But he’s still impressionable enough to be completely awed by “Jack Bauer, Secret Agent”! But seriously, I love it that Jack became a role model for Derek. I was glad to see him planning bigger goals for his future and still looking out for his mother. And I love seeing Jack being thoughtful and considerate. I think he has tremendous capacity for compassion although we don’t see it a lot because of the nature of the show.

I’m excited to find out what you have in store for their future. Once again, you’ve gotten me completely caught up in the story! I’ll go read the final chapter now...

I loved this chapter! The dialogue between Jack and Audrey was so well-written. You’ve done a superb job implying so much about their relationship through the silences in their conversation and through even their superficial chitchat in the beginning of the chapter. It really set the tone of discomfort and doubt.

It was strangely nice to see such an amicable breakup. I was happy to see how, even though Jack and Audrey no longer wanted to be together, they both wished each other well. They both behaved very maturely, especially with Audrey telling Jack about Diane’s feelings. I’m not a big fan of Audrey, but she certainly has improved from Day 4 when I wanted to toss her out of a helicopter. I like that you’ve portrayed her in a balanced way. It’s rather odd- in this chapter, I think I most clearly saw Audrey’s flaws, but I also felt the most proud of her and most hopeful for her future.

Also, I loved how it was Chloe who talked sense into Kim. I can just imagine Chloe bluntly telling her to get a grip and get over herself!

I just keep loving this story more and more. I’m really looking forward to the next chapter on Diane.

I felt so happy for Jack as I was reading this chapter! I only wish that this was actually what happened. Seeing him reconcile with Kim (a nice, reasonable, Barry-less Kim), resolve the Chinese problem, get a good job with his friends, in addition to saving the day, was just so great. Plus I think it was a great idea in this story to put Jack back in full control of his life in order to see what choices he will make regarding Audrey and Diane. It’s good that he can really figure out what he wants. But he also can’t hide behind any excuses like the Chinese being after him. Now that his life is back in order and he seems to be where exactly where he wants to be, he really has to face the situation. And I’m curious how either Audrey or Diane would fit into his new life.

Also, I really liked Jack’s conversation with Bill. You’ve completely nailed Bill’s character even in his brief appearances in this story. On the show I loved watching the two of them work together and seeing their mutual respect for each other, especially because they are such different men with such different styles. I liked how you noted that Jack had only seen Bill in crisis mode. It’s almost bizarre how well they get along considering that they only worked together for a few hours of insanity during Day 4, followed by Jack disappearing, with the exact same thing happening on Day 5. But anyway, I love the idea of Jack, Curtis, and Bill all working together in the long term.

Great job again, and on to the next chapter!

Now first of all, that was HOT! Wow, let me go fan myself for a bit. Sexy but lonely Jack, yum. Anyway, this was another terrific chapter. Once again, it was great to see some background to Jack’s relationships- this time the one between him and Audrey. I loved the contrast between Audrey and Diane. You’ve done a great job showing what drew Jack to both women in spite of how different they were. They fulfilled what he needed during tough, lonely times. They are also both strong women, though their strength manifests itself in very different ways. I wonder if he can reconcile his two very different lives with these two very different women. But, like you wrote, Jack first needs to figure out what kind of life he will lead after this day. (I had to laugh at the part where he considers disappearing again by going on a long sea journey. Be careful what you wish for, Jack!)

Again great job on this story! I really love it so far. I often wish we got to see more background stories and moments of reflection on the show. I’ll be back again soon to read the remaining chapters!

That was another excellent, well-written chapter! I'm really getting into this story! I felt bad for the Huxleys on the show. They were just dismissed after Jack reunited with Audrey. Although Jack did promise to talk with Derek after the whole ordeal was over. I hope they don’t hold their breath waiting for him. I like to imagine that the Day 5 characters who just kind of disappeared, like the Huxleys, Wayne Palmer, and the Russian President and First Lady, are in fact hanging out at Bill’s house eating all the food and watching Twilight Zone reruns. But I’m getting off track.

I’m happy you’ve written about Jack’s interaction with Diane and Derek during his time in hiding. It was very realistic but also quite sweet. They provided a safe haven and a kind of surrogate family for him. I imagine that meant a lot to Jack after having to abandon everyone. It was nice to see how they brought out a kinder, gentler side to him. After reading this chapter, I can’t help but wonder what would have happened if Jack never had to come out of hiding.

I also enjoyed what you’ve done with Diane’s character. The past that you’ve given her is quite realistic and contrasts nicely with Audrey’s classy, privileged background. Her blossoming romance with Jack was very sweet. I laughed at her wondering if he was gay. Diane, this is JACK BAUER! I also liked how you depicted her feeling uncomfortable at CTU. It was probably the last place she expected to end up that day. And she really looked out of place in the glass walls and bluish light of CTU with her loose red curls, yellow t-shirt, and jeans. Her figuring out about Jack and Audrey and comparing herself to the latter were so genuinely sad.

Ooh, I see the next chapter is about Jack! I can’t wait to read it!

Great job with this first chapter! You’ve hooked me into another Audrey story. I didn’t think it would be possible! When I first saw this part on the show, I remember thinking what a contrived situation it was to have Audrey, of all people, interrogate Diane. But you’ve made great use of it to fully explore the complexity and ambivalence of Audrey’s feelings. Her confusion on finding out about Jack and her self-recrimination on recalling her behavior to him were very realistic and vivid. And the way you portrayed how she tried to suppress her jealousy and maintain a professional demeanor was also well done and very true to her character. I also like how you are setting up the contrast between Audrey and Diane, both physically and emotionally.

I think it’s an excellent idea to show this scene from the perspectives of the different characters. It was definitely one of those moments where I was wondering what everyone was thinking and feeling. So if “No Greater Love” was sort of like a “Choose Your Own Adventure” book, then would this story be comparable to something like the movie “Rashomon”? Hmm, I’m not sure yet. Well, I’m off to the next chapter!

I guess I should have reviewed this sooner. As you probably know, I'm a big Jack/Audrey fan so I am disappointed that they didn't end up together, but nonetheless, I thought this was really well-written and thoughtful. If Jack and Audrey's relationship before season 4 really was just physical like you described it then Jack probably made the right choice, and I like how you showed Audrey's flaws but didn't villify her, and you had her learn from the experience and resolve to change for the better. I also liked how you had Jack be upfront about the fact that he "can't guarantee his own safety"...very important, since we learned from season 4 that no matter how hard Jack tries to get away from all that, "instinct never dies." Anyways, great job with this, and I look forward to reading more stuff from you, as I always enjoy your stories.

I finally saw episode 5 (“the look”) and read you story again. Loved the format, the three points of views and epilogues. TheJack - Audrey part was excellent. I can really imagine it happening like that. Sneaking around, lots of sex, Audrey in the center. I’m not sure I see Jack and Diane together—not that I want to see him with Audrey! I guess I still imagine him with Kate…Anyway, I loved the way you described Diane’s fears and concerns:
“Jack, you’re more educated and more sophisticated and classier than anyone I’ve ever been with.”
“And you think my idea of sex is different than other men?” he queried her, still not fully comprehending her concern.
“I just want to be able to please you, Jack”.
Jack is wonderful in that part! And I love fairytale endings!
As always, I’m looking forward for your next story.