" One side affect and you won't get to live to see your third birthday. "

AHAHAHAHAHAHH AHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHHAHA
OH OMG, so funny . that is rich . man, that gave me a hell of a laugh.

:P

I'm sad about the decision, but I understand. I'm glad you got out as much as you did (and a bit impressed), and good luck with all of your other stories.

Aww... Hoe come you've stopped posting here?

-Takes a deep breath then cries dramatically.- NOO! HOW COULD YOU! Dx I liked this story. Well, I guess I understand. I just don't like it. One bit. ;__; I'll miss this story. Funnily enough, I found this story first then found the prequel to it. I loved it. And I loved this one equally as much. I wish you wouldn't give up on it, but I guess it can't be helped. At least we'll have some closure on the ending of this story, unlike a lot of others. It still upsets me though. D: Sigh. I look forward to the Adventures of the Mind Minions though. I'm truly sorry that you can't write this story anymore.

no... NO... NO! HOW COULD YOU? I nearly CRIED when I read this! WHY?

I respect what your doing, even though I don't like it one bit. Better luck next time, huh?
~Love Moonlight Eagle

It's okay, I'm not mad. :> Although it did seem great to me, I'm not going to push anyone into something they don't want to do. I'll be looking forward to that other one. :3

-Scissors

how do you blow up a furby?

Awesome!! Update please!

I'm lazy so I actually plan to comment on all chapters right here and now in this review. I read the first story at school when our internet at home was cut off but that was over a year ago so I'm a little rusty on some bits and won't complain about those but if something I say pertains to something I forget I'm sorry.

Let's see... I can't think of anything from the first couple chapters so I'm jumping to the third. First off, Japanese kids would know of the world wars 'cause I have a friend from Japan and a friend in Japan and they both know of them. It's like China though, they cover the parts that make the country look bad. (Look up Tienanmen Square through a Chinese search engine and you only get nice happy pictures, look through a site here in America and the most common/famous picture you'll see is the college kid in front of the tank in the middle of the road.) Secondly, please never call Kurama that again. It might be commonplace in Japan(because it is commonplace) but for Americans at least (the majority of the public reading English stories) it is a very degrading thing to call someone. Also, I'm sure Ayumi is much stronger than at least Mika once she actually tries but I'm not gonna give her too much credit 'cause she apparently likes Hiei and he could die the worst of deaths for all I care. Onto chapter four!

Weird... I think I might have actually reviewed some of this before... The story is kinda familiar and I could swear I'd commented on your after notes in this chapter. Hm...

Oh well, chapter five now. Oh, and in case you've been wondering, I'm writing as I read. Simple as that.(*smiles*) Also, there's no specific date-date for when the series is set but I know a girl who set them in later 1980's because of the hair/clothing styles and because Kuwabara's favorite band(and very popular at the time) is Megalliga, which is a spoof off Metalica. If it makes any difference, the series ran 1992-1994 in Shounen Jump and has been on tv several times since then. Now if you question was how long the series ran for of it's own right, well... Yuusuke was 14, a year later his egg hatched, about another year after that the Makai Bujutsukai was begun and at latest it was another two years because he promise Keiko to be back before 18. So I'd say the time line for the series was 3-4 years.

Now chapter 6! (*laughs*) Loved the whole reaction to the almost kiss scene, and you're kinda right about the shoujo comic part. Though I doubt they'd have four demons inside the lead female's head... Then again, I avoid shoujo anime if I can so who am I to say...

Chapter 7. (Laughs) Lovely airport comments but don't fear, not everyone would know all the security perfectly anyway... No ninjas please, Naruto has so killed that entire concept from being even relatively cool... And of course they play games all the time; games are loads of fun! Especially the evil ones...^^ Next chapter.

Edible staples...hilarious! Kuronue's normally not such an idiot but it does work for your story so I won't complain to you. And a pet? What sort of creature could put up with Mika at all? She's probably higher on the crazy scale than I am!

9 now... Wow, Kuronue making friends with Fred and George.. If the twins were still in school that would definitely be one mell of a hess!(Sorry, habit from a teacher, gets the point across without swearing...)

I didn't notice much in chapter 10 to comment on, though you did have a slight typo with the word 'time' Ayumi's sentence near the bottom about looking for Kuronue. I highly doubt anyone could hate you for what you write; in fact, anyone actually following your stories would have to be crazy enough to accept anything you write. (*nods*)

Wow, next to last chapter now. Almost scary to be so near done with what you've got posted... No comments on this one though, nothing I could find to say.

Chapter 12 now, yikes. You'd better post again soon or I'll lose what little of my mind is left waiting on an update to a story that got me so obsessed... And didn't Mika take caution to hide her memory room but now is so keen to just toss them all in there? Couldn't she just come up with some other "Containment" room or something for them to be out of the way and not causing her more trouble than necessary? Makes perfect sense why Ayumi would fear water, even if there wasn't a drowning incident in her childhood or whatnot. I would think Harry and/or the others would have led the girls to the carriages though. Although if it's for your plot then I can see why they'd go in the boats...

Too bad about you being busy though; it's never any fun to not have any time to yourself. Hope this wasn't too much/took too long to read.

luv the story
me likey
can't wait for the next chapie
please update

Darkfire

Really funny! Will there be a pairing for Mika and Ayumi?

Ah!! You wrote more! I love it of course, and you're right, Autumn is refreshing! I'm really curious on how this is to turn out!

Great Job, I loved it, and can hardly wait for the next chapter!

Ja!

Love it update again soon. ^.^