|Reviews for Bleeding Through|
| oldandnewfirm 1/31/13 . chapter 25
I re-read "Thunderheads..." through "Bleeding Through" for the second time after being out of KP fandom for a few years, and I was delighted to find that it's just as great as I remember it. It's an ambitious tale that delves into a level of maturity that the show couldn't have accomplished even if it wanted to, and melding the comparatively carefree cast with the harrowing, bleaker world you've crafted isn't easy to pull off, but you managed it beautifully. Though there are some rough spots- I thought that the several chapters of Kim and Ron training at Yamagouchi dragged a bit, for example- it's overall a wonderful story, and one that really sticks with you long after it's over. Reading it again was a true pleasure, and I look forward to re-re-reading it in another five years!
One question, though- as you've left fandom I don't expect an answer, but perhaps one of the other reviewers will pipe in- what exactly do people remember about Drew and Sheila after the Unshaper's defeat?
It's clear that Sheila et al still remember being Team Go, which makes sense: they were Team Go long before they knew that the source of their powers was the Unshaper, so their memories would revert to a point before they became aware of the Unshaper's influence on them. In Hego, Mego, and Wego's case that would be before they were called in by Global Justice, and in Sheila's case that would be before or shortly after she slept with Drew.
My assumption was that the world's memory of Drakken and evil!Shego would be erased as well, but the Crash Damage epilogue specifically mentions that Shego was reported dead after the battle at the Space Center. The problem is that Sheila is still very much alive, so unless the world has been made to forget that the Gomez family were Team Go- which seems unlikely, given that no one seems surprised that the Gomez family was present in the aftermath of the battle- then it won't take people long to point out that reports of Shego's death were highly overrated. And also to point out that she's still a wanted criminal, along with her partner in crime Drew Lipsky, both of whom would have no idea what their accusers were talking about.
I know, I know, I'm thinking too hard. But I just can't work out how the magic could erase Sheila and Drew's memories of being Drakken and evil!Shego without ALSO erasing the world's memories of that as well. It's been niggling at me for days.
| holydemon00 1/24/13 . chapter 20
I'm sure I should have recognised the name " " but I can't. Who is he?
| holydemon00 1/24/13 . chapter 14
Was the scene in Middleton a reference to Stephen King's the Mist? Bunch of survivor stuck in a supermarket, surrounded by weird shit (for some reason I was pretty fascinated when Kim used the words, btw)
| holydemon00 1/24/13 . chapter 4
Well, I see a flaw in Sensei's logic. What about Monkey Fisk, DNAmy, Dementor, Killigan, the Seniors, are they all infected by Evil Dark Magic? In particular, the Senior becomes evil because of Ron, and they aren't above dropping a chained Kim, sealed in a coffin, into a bottomless pit filled with water and sharks. I bet every spies and agents around the world would prefer getting raped and tortured to such scenario.
| An 1/19/13 . chapter 4
Nothing kills childhood magic better than explaining it. You can re-invent it. You can change the scene and pace of the world.
But to keep the same perspective of the TV show then try to make it adult? That's different. That's disgusting. That's what you're doing.
When does it show?
When Sensei/ author info dump starts rationalizing Rufus' intelligence by magic, starts introducing this whole Drakken "sucks because he wants to suck" shtick. Fuck that noise.
Turning Drakken into a villain because of an STD sucks. I can deal with that Unshaper energy thing. Makes sense. Hero turns into a villain. Great.
Personally, I like it better that she left because she was bored. That's even more rational. But that's negligible.
But bitch, turning the essential badness of the Doctor into a side effect of Shego's creepy meteor crabs is weak. Drakken's fine with his obsessions and insecurities. It's comical and accurate.
| Shebali 10/10/12 . chapter 26
Well. This took me longer to get through than Bleeding Out, but it was definetly time well spent. I'll have to reread this story sometime later, 'cause I was in such a hurry to get to the end, I think I might have missed some stuff. Oh well, more fun for me later.
In the meantime, just let me say that I enoyed your story immensely (all of your KP stuff is great, really) and I'm ever so glad I checked the tvtropes recs. Yep, didn't think one could have a KP story starring an Eldritch abomination. Yep, you did it. In a really awesome way, too.
Any new story you write, I'll be there to read it. Even if it's not from the fandom I'm currently interested in.
| Tragic warrior 11/24/11 . chapter 26
To reach the end is such sweet sorrow. You need to do what you need to do. Great story.
| Tragic warrior 11/24/11 . chapter 25
The Possibles, being a scientist and doctor, are unlikely to understand magic and the effects they have. Perhaps it's for the best. Good job on this chapter.
| Tragic warrior 11/24/11 . chapter 24
How is Felix walking again?
| OhNoaBear 9/9/11 . chapter 26
It took me a while to figure out how to properly review this series. Throwing a review on everyone of the stories seemed disingenuous, but not reviewing was a crime. After a time, I decided to throw this where I do for most stories I read: at the end.
First and foremost, want to say that this is a fantastic story. From beginning to end, it is a work of craft and artistry that was a thrill to read as a person who fancies themselves well read and informed. It is not, however without its flaws.
My main issue lies in the pacing. This series toes the line of the ideal interest curve, but misses it by a fractional amount. By the end, I was reading it mostly to get it finished, not out of any sort of involvement in the story. That is not good. Contributing to the relatively mild pacing issues was a slew of fairly derivative and vague phillosophical insights that I have heard before and better from other sources. They aren't bad, they would probably work fantastically on a less experienced reader, but they are very much "been there, done that, faced the madness of the human soul" for me.
This was an ambitious project, and as such cannot be expected to be perfect nor condemned for falling short of perfection. The work itself is where much of the greatness of this comes from, and it is great work.
If you are stil reading these, I wish to tell you you have accomplished great work at least once,
| Rye-bread 12/9/10 . chapter 2
Again I revisit this superb cycle. There’ve been others in the KP community who’ve applied themselves to writing fic’s that fuse the Kim mythos and classic myths from humanity’s religious history. Some, like
LoveRobin, and your most presumptuous reviewer, have sought to construct a backstory for the whole MMP mythos, or Michael Howard in his story Undercover allude to the Cthulhu mythos, have done it independently. Some, like Screaming Phoenix, acknowledge your influence in his story Twin Flames Of Darkness. But as far as I can tell, you were the first.
I’m also liking your take on the Ronicus story. Many of us have tried our hand at that. Mr. Wizard has a whole battery of stories. But again, you were early in the game.
I’m impressed even by the allusion to the enmity between the Celts and Romans. You took the time to research and incorporate real world data to lend your tale the authenticity. Like the name Siobhan. It’s from Irish Gaelic Celtic stock. The name I chose for my Kim char (which I won’t mention here) in my Ronicus variant is Saxon. And Romanic Britain was centuries away from Saxon influence. Will I rewrite? Nope. Having established my conventions, I’m going to live with the damage.
I hope it’s not gauche to mention other names of fanwriters and fanstories. I do it with the intent of averring that you set the bar.
| Pojko 12/5/10 . chapter 26
A wonderful, well thought out, and original series. Great job.
| vase 11/29/10 . chapter 1
| vase 11/29/10 . chapter 18
Simply brilliant! f I said before I say it again story with legendary hero and prophecy are what I live for couple that with love that death can't conquer then I am hooked.
Your writing is crisp yet slow and deliberate, everything is connecting. The battle scenes are good but not too drawn out the interaction with the rents and friends don't take away from the story but add to it.
What is most interesting is how you present the different views of code of conduct in battle that comes to light between Kim on Ron. All makes for an entertaining story.
A lot of time is spent these last few chapters displaying Kim in her warrior mode would have liked to have seen more of the visage of The Laughing Magician that caught the eye of Nana Possible. Just like Kim you say Ron is an equal part of the equation but your story is still presenting him as support still the sidekick. More of the Laughing Magician would be nice.
| vase 11/28/10 . chapter 9
"She stared at him for a moment, then, in one abrupt, ferocious movement, got to her feet and threw Stoppable-san over her shoulder. She carried him off in the direction of the guest house, with the Lotus Blade still in her hand, her own weapons still buried in the ground."
Damn That had to be one of the most Badical scenes ever!