Very to-the-point, but it was a poignant point! Not a lot of people choose to focus on Frodo's growing attraction to the ring because not much is known for certain, but you did it nicely and I applaud you for that. One thing I have to mention in a little bit of a minor key is that you are very fond of comas. Maybe a little too fond of commas. If you're having trouble finding where to put them, it helps a lot to actually read your sentences aloud to yourself and pause where the commas are, just to see if it's working. If there are more than three or four in one sentence, either some of them are not needed or the sentence is including way too many thoughts. Hope that helps!

~Meg ^_~