Ooh...nice, FH! (BTW, this is Sunny from Crim.) Very original and a nicely written little drabble...I like it.

Hello, FHFHFHFHFHFHFHFH.

I was reading this, because - er - I have my reasons... (*pokes self in eye for The Lack Of Secrecy.*) And I thought you might an appreciate a review. [s]Well, you're getting one, anyway [/s]

The concept is (obviously) freakishly cool, and fun. The sentences are snappy, and the adjectives well chosen (though I'd like to see a bit of variation in the description style, but that's sort of hard in une drabble - which brings me on to my con-crit...)

Why a drabble? Why?! This is just such a nice idea, but - at the same time as being well written - this!is!a!waste!

Each sentence seems to explode with a mulititude of questions, and exciting possibilities (sp). It would have been nice, if you could explore them further. I feel cheated. And it *is* a labour, after all.

Mozzie - who is off to read Solving the Riddle, because well...

Note to anyone who, like me, reads reviews before reading the fic: THIS REVIEW CONTAINS MAJOR SPOILERS FOR THE FIC.

Hello, FH! (You do know who I am, right? Well, I'm not telling. If you don't know you'll simply have to guess.) I won't bother with c&p'ing my usual "this is concrit, not a flame" spiel.

I find it funny that your author's note was longer than your actual fic. But then, this review is almost certain to be longer than your fic.

Yes, it would have been much better if you had been able to keep The Reader from realising that She's a robot until the very end. I suggest you use more personification, e.g. describing her devotion as adoring. I liked the first paragraph. I think you could tie in "reflection" in the fourth sentence—maybe "her every ability reflects mine perfectly" or something? I also think "for that is how I made her" would work better as "for I forced/taught [pick one] her to be that way." (Twisted!Artemis!) You can't reveal that he created her. Likewise, you have to find some sneaky way of saying, "I built her," because that's a dead giveaway. I really liked the line, "Devotion is close enough to love for me." "Her cold, smooth arm," was a good phrase which subtly implied that She was human. Instead of "her sensors shut off at night," maybe say she's asleep or something? I liked the last line, but if you're going for ego-y Arty/self, you could change "notice" to "admire."

Overall, nicely done. If you could keep it secret that She was a robot, this would be really good. Interesting concept, quite IC. Good job!

~Boussole