A great story. Very good.

I decided to try reviewing one more time and you write so well I couldn't resist.

Again we meet a few discrepencies (must learn to spell) concerning times and age. Jessie being older than Jonny would probably be a Sophomore unless Jonny were in the 8th grade. Hadji being at a seminar seems odd since he isn't much older than Jonny or Jessie. Some small things to consider.

I love your characters here because they seemed that much more realistic than the last one. The story was quick, and at one point the flow was cut short (when you switch from Jessie walking with Jonny back home to Jessie and Jason in the car) but other than that it was nice. Your continued focus on Jessie is pretty nice but don't dismiss the others quite so quickly. Getting into such a slump can hinder you.

All in all another great short. Very nice. Sometimes I think you have Jonny's personality down in Dialogue but not in action. He's more of a sports car guy rather than truck. Being rich does that to a kid. Not to mention the semi-spy like life they lead. He's use to sleek.

Aw...that was so cute!

Hahaha, I liked this. You played both characters well and the banter that they used seemed well in character and very funny to boot. Good job.