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Morceau 2006-04-16 ch 2,	abuseYou. Creator. Of. Brilliant. Fics. I apologize for never reviewing very quickly (sorry-sorry-sorry. T_T). I was mainly busy and I actually forgot to tag your story for alerting my empty email inbox for an update. But--I must state I was impressed. This was a marvellous chapter. NaruSaku could be done so badly; tarnished, and written harshly. It usually makes me wince with reckless/careless mistakes, and I often never enjoy them for that reason alone. They can also be Out of Character in nameless, horrific ways that often make me bang my head in frustration for Naruto or Sakura's lack of depth. This however . . . this was just awe-inspiring. All the vivid imagery, the elegant descriptions, the quiet subtlety, and especially the /tension/. It was all so perfectly done and thoughtful. Did I mention I love your portrayal of Sakura? Under your hand she feels so silently mature, so grave, and yet fragile (like her namesake); and she was expressed sorrowfully, desperate, and almost broken as I read through this. This was not nonsensical in the least, but instead deep, and captivating for the reader. You have an excellent grasp of literature, and subtext, and my interest as increased even further. I can only hope you will continue this story again. It is all but begging for more of these incredible word plays, and insane undertones that I have come to appreciate greatly in your stilited, poetic writing. Not melodramatic, and hazy, serene, and delicate, with utmost care and interesting paradoxes, and sharp edges in dialog and scenery. Your writing style is refreshing, haunting, with a side-dish of realism. Your stories are almost like carefully constructed songs, unfinished but promising to become better in bounds and leaps. You paint the words in mind's eye, and they affect the reader very much (or at least they affected me). Naruto was so sad, and quiet, and so loveable here. He was fleshed out, pried open to the soul, and his inner matureness was painful, yet brought out wonderfully here. I really felt a real stab to the gut as he confessed his love to Sakura, not loudly or emphatic, but quietly and with considerable emotion. (I desire a back story on how he developed into this, though.) /Reality is not truth./ And what can end this lovely--albeit short--chapter but a very effective and creepy, little sentence? Dammit, I know this will certainly linger and ruminate often in my mind afterward. Conclusively, this probably is not even good feedback. But I must say that this certainly does deserve more love and attention by other fans and writers within this crazy fandom.
ronshaberry 2006-03-12 ch 2,	abuseWowzers. That is lovely pairing-ish thingie there. I bet the Naruto/Sakura lovers and crying with joy for that. I love the last two paragraphs. And do I detect Jack Johnson?? :D Happiness, yeah. Nice! Someday, you should do a Naruto/Hina for me, because I like that pairing, sort of. Okay, I guess you don't want to.
conlan0414863 2006-03-10 ch 2,	abusekeep on typing and ill keep on reading
Meca Vegeta 2006-03-10 ch 2,	abusehuh?
Lucifer-the-great-undead 2006-03-09 ch 2,	abuseif reality is not truth, then i guess we're all living in an extensive and on-going lie. lol. cool.
Lucifer-the-great-undead 2006-02-27 ch 1,	abusewow interesting start if it's multichaptered. very vague in an identity sense and vivid in a fighting sense. anyway yes it's been very long since your last multi-chaptered. so what has happened with first impression?? lol.
Morceau 2006-02-23 ch 1,	abuse...Wow. That is the first word that comes up to mind after I finished reading this. Naruto was absolutely wonderfully portrayed here. The gruesome, vivid details and the fierce protectiveness he felt over her was described uniquely here. (For a minute there, I was actually convinved it was Gaara instead of Naruto since the redhead is far more violent, and creepy, but I pretty much realized it was the latter after he screamed, 'Sakura-chan!'.) Please continue writing this. I am literally astonished beyond belief by the powerful writing you displasyed here -- and it normally takes a lot of flowing writing to actually surprise me. This first chapter is practically screaming for some more gory fun afterward. And I am also looking forward to seeing what is going to happen to Sakura, and (poor) Naruto now. Your writing style is truly amazing, Elasticbobaturtle. And I am genuinely glad you are still writing; I haven't seen anything from you for a while now. I suspect this will be a NaruSaku story, though you may prove me wrong. Again. (If you haven't realized, I am a lurker, and I've read your fanfictions in the dark, I'm sorry for never commenting before.) Here's my favorite part: /The blood is draining out of his eyes, and the pain is really starting to come to him now, in excruciating little stinging and great flower petals of blood running down his face and arms./ Magnificent imagery, that's all I can say. It produces a stunning quality of realism and emotion; not many other authors have managed to quite write like this before.
ronshaberry 2006-02-22 ch 1,	abuseAhh, your writing style has changed. This is a very nice style. It's got ... a human feeling to it. I'm confused by the last line, hm? Mind explaining it to me next time?

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