Interesting idea. Is there more?

ooh.. what a touching story! but im glad that lord alan actually cares about his kids...

this is a really good fic. I never thought about Lord Alan's POV, so this is really good in my opinion. I hope you continue soon! Don't leave me hangin'!!

the whole point is he's not SUPPOSED to kno. this is good tho. really sad, but good.

first sign of insanity... talking to a picture.
I love your story!

thats so sad.

Just a second I need to go get a kleenex.

Okay. I'm back.
This was wonderful. So moving, and so sad! Great job!

Well. It's awesome. Except fot the punctiuation mistakes, which I have to bring up because they sort of killed an otherwise-good story. It's a bit like biting into a really good cookie that has bits of chili pepper in it. (I come up with the weirdest examples, don't I? Hm. I like that one.) You should write more, really you should. But you should use a spell/grammar checker (please!). Or you could have someone who obsesses about grammar and spelling (like me!) read it first.

A great start in the world of fanfic (Welcome!). You have real potential as a writer. Don't be afraid to use a little more description to really transport your readers into the story.
Oh and please can you publish in normal type, not all in bold. It makes it harder to read.

It was a really good idea and nicely done. The speech was good, you could improve it by adding in more description. A good first fic!!

Aww. I hate Alan! Muhahhahhahaha.