Awwww! I really liked this. :) Thanks for writing it!

Nice story! I really liked it. The one thing, though, is they seemed a tad bit OOC for Narnians. They use some modern day expressions and terms, which I doubt they'd have used. BUT. Besides that, magnifique!

Aw.

How sweet is this story. _

I just felt so mushy reading this.

(you stare blankly at me as I turn into mush)

this was a beautiful story! I loved it! very cute!

great ending! mushy is good, cause it makes us all feel good when we read it. Tumnus giving her his scarf was adorable, he's so sweet the way you write him! (well, yeah he's sweet anyway, but i mean you keep him in character very well_).

so, no sequel? that's too bad, this was a great story. i hope maybe we can see some more Narnia stuff from you eventually.

bye for now!

Wonderful! I Loved it!

Thank you for writing it!,

Sarah, A Mr.Tumnus fan :)

Exciting! A little confusing, but still great!

Thanks,

Sarah, A Mr.Tumnus Fan

*gasp!*

but...but...

*gasp!*

cliffhanger? aw man, i hate it when that happens...still it was a good spot to cut it. specially if you were trying to ensure whoever's reading will be back for the next chapter (well, i'll be there anyway, but if i weren't then i would definitely stop by to see what happens!)

did that last part make any sense? sorry.

oh, and nicely written on the action-y stuff! i find that's something i have trouble with but your's turned out great!

heh, she so wanted to follow him...

arguments are nice. i don't know why, but i enjoy seeing characters going at each other's throats (just once in awhile, it stirs things up).

hurrah for new chapters!

aw, what a cute interaction...i do hope you meant it to be cute. i liked the "you're rather lovely" bit. and her being a bit sassy there _

here i am at last, to review the rest of the story!

i like your opening, Hazelle was introduced very well. _ but poor Tumnus...i suppose going through what he has would make anyone a little snappish.

Squee! Me likey! Run, dammit, RUN!

Please forgive that outburst...and UPDATE!

Good! Very good! Keep going! I'll be on the lookout for more lol! :)

Thanks,

Sarah, A Mr.Tumnus Fan

Wonderful stuff, you have a great, almost spiritual internal battle raging in this character. It's almost as though she is really consumed with both external and internal battles going on. I'm really enjoying this one.

I don't understand why you are so insecure about your writing here, this is a really sweet story that you have going on. I am not much for OC as romantic interest characters (I'm pretty much LucyxTumnus through and through), but this is really a very sweet story, and I like Hazelle's character.

I sincerely hope that you will give yourself the chance to create something special by bringing this story to an end. It is not easy to put yourself up for scruitany, and so I applaud your courage in submitting this story.

Let's have another chapter. It's always a bummer when good writers give up on a story, before it gets finished.