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Sanna Lan 2008-06-05 ch 3,	abuseOuch, that's gotta hurt. But don't waste time self-pitying... I'll pity you in your place =^.^= Now, for the real review... Damn. Suicide isn't supposed to be so beautiful, you know? But... well, what can I say? It was so sad... I can't find words to describe just how beautiful and so sad and so peaceful and so hopeful this is. I just can't. I'm not sure they exist, in fact. But hey, at least they are together... forever. Joined as one in the Astral Line. I like that. In the end I couldn't help but to smile ^.^ And thanks for the info on the Great Depression. It might come handy in the exams (next week T-T) I wish my History teacher was as good at explaining things as you. P.S. LOL, this is why I love the 'Behind the Scenes'. It's hard not to laugh. I loved the little AzXJoshua 'bashing'. It was weird and OOC, but kind of cool.
Sanna Lan 2008-06-03 ch 2,	abuseActually, reading fanfics is awfully time-consuming, you know? I have to hurry or I won't be able to read every single CC fic there is. =^.^= But, oh how I love to whine about the anime! As the manga is my obsesion, I can help but to find some parts of this chapter just wrong. The part of the children coming back to life was really cute. Billy's expresion must've been priceless. It was somewhere in the grave scene that lost that WAFFeeling. Where Rosette says that she was jealous of Magdalene, it goes against the Rosette we all know and love... but I'm not in a ranting mood right now, so let's just leave it in 'me no likes it', shall we? wants to keep reviewing the next chapter, but Morpheo decides he misses her --almost 22 hours they haven't seen each other is a lot of time for a teen
Sanna Lan 2008-06-03 ch 1,	abuse-crying- Aw, Chrno. He's just so cute. And so sad, too. You kept him very In Character. Which is a bad thing. Not for you, of course, but for him. It's kind of making me depressed how he keeps 'stealing' her life - even if she gives it to him - and how the guilt is consumming him. The most interesting line - the most heartbreaking one - was : «But his own feelings could be damned, his own shame and guilt could go ahead and torture him mercilessly - it didn't matter.This was about what she wanted, and nothing else mattered» I was damn near tears when I read it. This was a very beautiful chapter, even though I'm against the anime continuity, and I could rant for hours about how damn wrong it is. You make it seem so magnificent. Congratulations.
funvince 2007-12-25 ch 3,	abuseThis was beautiful. I liked how you fleshed out the scenes we did see and made them more, well, more. I too was dissatisfied with the ending of the anime. I could have dealt with the heroes dying or with the message that evil can never truly be defeated but only slowed down but having both was simply too much for me. The idea of Chrno and Rosette playing tag in the sky is a funny and pretty image.
kingleby 2007-09-19 ch 3,	abusegreat fic! ^_^ it definately gives the anime ending a more hopeful ending. beautifully written too!
trunksgirl85 2007-08-15 ch 3,	abuseAh, thank you! Thank you so much! I've spent the last week watching Chrono Crusade and enjoyed it immensely. But the ending kinda left me feeling well depressed. I cried of course. I cried reading your version of the ending. Them dying wasn’t what really bothered me but that everything they’d worked for over the years never truly came to pass. Sure, they saved some people but darnit, no one got anything in the end and it just made me mad! And watching poor Azmaria lose it was just horrible! And they didn’t give Chrono a headstone! What kind of crap is that?! And Aion gets to live! Oh, why I oughta… Okay now I’m just taking everything out on you and rambling so I’ll just review and shut up. First off, I loved that you most of it from Chrono’s point of view. Because I did notice him moving so slow and looking fairly rough at the end. I was curious at to why. I thought it was just his wounds but you pointed out something’s I hadn’t thought about. You honestly made the ending harder to stomach with his guilt-ridden thoughts. But I felt it was something that wasn’t emphasized as much in the anime. At least not enough for me. And your reason for Rosette saying thank you as her last words was also helpful. It was too late to say she loved him. But your story as a whole did help me find some closure. From them lifting the spell off the orphanage to Chrono’s last dying moments. The way you portrayed it was so romantic. Twisted yes but what they did put Romeo and Juliet to shame. He did everything within his power to follow her. That last image of them on the swing was heart-wrenchingly sweet. I’ll be depressed for a while now. But your Astral Line thing at the end was a pleasant surprise. Quite cute and fairly amusing with Remmington getting a kick out of their less-then-decent antics. And then there was all that out of story bickering afterwards. Heh, thanks for making me smile man, great job! I’ll be checking out your other fics as well. P.S. Sorry about the length! D;
The Wonderful K.Muffin 2007-06-15 ch 3,	abuseSugoi (awesome)! I really like the style of the story and it's like the best fan fiction I ever read in my ENTIRE LIFE!! It's so perfect...that I'm envious... It really teaches you about somethng.
Princess-Lalaith 2007-04-27 ch 3,	abuseOkay...I think that was kind of bizarre...but anyway, I do think it was nice, in a very strange way, but it was nice anyway. Good job.
GoldAngel2 2007-04-10 ch 2,	abuseI wanted to read some of your work to return the favor of reviewing...and because of time constraints I chose this... First I want to say I agree with you wholeheartedly about the anime being a bit campy or cheesy at times-which is why I prefer the manga... Yet the yawning gap in time from the defeat of Aion in episode 23 to when Rosette and Chrono are found at the farmhouse screams to be filled--and your story does so...admirably. I am attempting the same in my story "Six Months". I like how you have Chrono exercising his dormant demon powers--by choosing to reserve them and preserve his beloved's life in healing from the wound inflicted by Aion--and I liked how he invoked them to tap into Aion's power to restore Seventh Bell (In "Six Months" I have him wearing them to channel the Astral Line to do the same). I see we have similar styles of writing-visually descriptive narratives and your use of imagery is quite good-along with dialogue that flows and is natural, not cliched or stilted--or too contrived... And your handling of fluff is quite moving for a man-most men dont bother with the emotional aspect behind the physical. Mostly from Chrono's POV which is understandable and gives me a glimpse of what I perceive from those garnet eyes of his.. Over all, a very satifying yarn-that could've easily fit into the anime rather well.
piwqefjk 2006-12-04 ch 3,	abuseThat ending was so beautiful. The dying part really did bring tears to my eyes, just like it did in the anime. It was amazing. You've done a brilliant job.
Jeh-may 2006-10-23 ch 3,	abuseI had some doubts about this story after reading the summary, but now you have proven me totally, absolutely wrong. This story has to be the best anime-ending-compensation I've ever read! lol The anime wasn't as great as the manga but you've made it a whole lot better with just a few chapters! Can't wait to read the reincarnation story!
BelleDayNight 2006-08-05 ch 3,	abuseLOL for the post script dialogue...I liked Az's comment about why everyone pairs her up with a retard. HAHAHA! I liked Chrno and Ros playing tag in the astral line and...this was a rather poetic type chapter. Sorry for you bad luck a few months ago...getting drunk then burning your noodles (hehe...mental picture...not appropriate) and destroying electronic stuff. I almost accidentally demagnetized my computer's harddrive two months ago...that was a stressful time!
BelleDayNight 2006-08-05 ch 2,	abuseNice surprise on Chrno's part to unfreeze the orphanage. You've really got both characters down pat, excellent characterization! And I like your interpretation of Mary Magdalene too.
BelleDayNight 2006-08-05 ch 1,	abuseThis is a nice start, very sweet. I can't believe you're a guy and writing sweet stuff. That's unusual. :-P Glad you're doing it though! Off to the next chapter.
Lisilgirl 2006-07-18 ch 3, anon.	abuseAH hahahahaahahahahahahahahahahahhahaah! I laugh. You nearly made me spill coffee over my desk. Anyway, I liked that. It was sweet. Keep up the works!

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