Wow. It was so... dark. And tragic. I love that sort of story :)

You've got a... great style of writing too, so keep it up (Sorry, didn't know how to phrase that). I just wish it was longer.

very nicely done.

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wow. -smile- i liked it. you have a different writing style that i really like

aww, i like it. Sad, but i like it. :]

*snaps for you*

omg! those last five sentences really got to me, i swear i reread them over and over. tragically beautiful effect. excellent.

Aw, poor Derek. That's awful - in the 'good story' kind of way. ;) Good job!

...OMGoodness! thazt last night gave me goosebumps- very well done- I loved it!

Awe... *sniffs*

Great story!

-Steph

This is good, I want to read more!

The only thing is, the brother's name is Edwin, not Edmond, and their last name doesn't have an O in it.

i seriously loved this, sounds very interesting! plz update soon!

Very interesting. Only one problem. At one point you said that his best friend's name was Adam, and then you switched it to Aaron. Otherwise, great job. Catch ya on the flip side.

i love it. its sad but I really love it. I like the end the best"The last conversation we had before going to dinner? Who was going to sit in the front seat.

I wish I'd won."

It made me cry.