Alright... I guess that was... okay, for such a long update gap. It was a fairly good chapter even despite the lack of action or drama, but it raised fairly important questions I've been asking for a while, mainly concerning Rigby. Good job - however, are they really putting their guard down around that little thief? Moogles can be very crafty, and since he's a moogle, his age can be deceiving... what if he isn't just a little kid? Do moogles age? XD

Anyway, cool chapter. Cant wait for the next.

OH YEAH! I'm LOVIN' it...even though I only read chapter 1. But it's still good! Keep going please!

Oh, BTW, I was told by a friend about this site, and he was right about it. So...um...could you tell me how this works?

Yeah, that was quite a long update. I'm not going to lie to you - I completely forgot about this story until I got the alert. I'm glad I didn't take the story off, however.

Anyway, it was a good, actiony chapter. The effects of Lani's spell were very powerful. She can only use that in Sandros, correct? If not, then it's TOO powerful o.O... So why did Exodus choose Lani to cast the spell? Wasn't Exodus a Nu Mou?

And, by the way, since you're using the races in the Ivalice Alliance, Exodus is the Totema of the Viera~. So is that why she chose Lani? o.o

Woo! So now the group consists of Mist, Lani, Zan, Rigby, Guiness, and Meranim? Cool. But isn't Meranim an old lady? XD

The plot of the story is moving along nicely. Unfortunately, the updates aren't. Please continue this story =)

Great chapter, it was fun and exciting and overall enjoyable to read. The action was written very well, as well as the instance where Mist was hit by Bad Breath. You've explained the reasons why characters do what they do when they're under that influence, instead of passing it off as "Oh no! She was hit by the confusion/berserk status effect!"

Amazing use of mature, effective vocabulary in this chapter. My English teacher would be proud.

There are two things that I thought were quite funny in this chapter. You used oxymorons! First one:

"It was a welcome change to the usual expected unexpected troubles they had been encountering."

Expected unexpected? XD That one might have been a mistake.

"...mused a harsh but cheery voice from the shadows."

Harsh but cheery? That doesn't quite make sense...

Anyway, aside from that, this was a great chapter. I'm a little disappointed Rigby and Guiness didn't go with them into the Tower, because I would like to see more of them. Update soon!^^

Lol, I'd love to work for SE...

Anyway, good chapter. It was a fairly long gap, but not as long as last time.

Lol.. Rigby is adorable XD We've seen a bit of his personality, but I'd like to see more. Also, more of Guiness would be nice.

The gang has got a lot of fights ahead of them, huh? As always, your action scenes were great... but maybe the next party member will be one hundred percent mage. They need one of those. Perhaps Meranim? Not all party members have to be young.

Anyway, cant wait for the next update!

I have got to state you are very talented in story writing, and I must be honest you inspire me. So far I have only read 2 chapters of Final Fantasy but I have already fallen in love with the characters.

I too am a story writer who tries his best to implement little signs of Final Fantasy. ^_^

Sorry about your cat =( I know what it's like to lose one.

It was a well-written chapter, a nice break from action and romance. But I'm not going to lie, this chapter wasn't worth that long of a wait. Hopefully the next one will be better ^^

So why did Mist leave the cart anyway? What did she see? Was it just the children crowding around the cat? =/

At first, I thought it was their cart that hit the cat and they didn't realize it O.o That would've been awkward for Mist. So... I wonder if they will tell Rigby about their adventure? He does seem innocent enough, but his occupation makes you wonder. They do need another permanent friend to confide in, though. Anyway, nice light chapter. Can't wait for the next one!

Hmm, two? Unless Guiness is permanently staying with them, I guess. Rigby seems like a cool little Moogle =D Lol, I think they need more mages in their group. But EVERY game needs a thief. Good job =D lol. Update soon ^^

Lol, nice way to defeat a wyrm. Funny how they were so worried about fighting it, and Zan didnt even have to do anything. Anyway, I wasn't expecting Fenrir to be a moogle still, when summoned. It still works though ^^ oh, I dont know if you answered this my last review, but Lani and Zan are summoners too, right? If they are, why didnt Fenrir fly into them? Are they splitting up all the avatars/espers/summonable things between the three of them?
Nice chapter, looking forward to the next one!

Woohoo:D an update!
Okay... I was wondering why you gave all the sorcerers esper/avatar/aeon (whatever!) names. So... all three of them are summoners? If they are, how come Fenrir didn't fly into Lani and Zan?
Looks like next chapter will be tough for them. The serpent and the wyrm... at the same time? Please update sooN!

lol, dont feel unappreciated :( Its a good story XD Damn you for that cliffhanger! Eh... but I use them sometimes too lol. Doesnt look like you update too much though. But thats understandable, obviously you dont sit around and do nothing all day. Thats good ^^ Anyways, please update soon!

Interesting story idea so far ^^ I like it. Your characters are original, too, but will there be any more main ones besides those three? If you wanted to make this like a FF game, you need to add a few more characters :D I never realized the main characters in the other games had names after elements... What is Zidane? And Tidus? lol... anyway, i gotta go to bed now, i'll read more tomorrow :D

Forgive both my tardiness and my tactless alliteration, Sky. My memory isn't what it used to be.

Now... first, I'd just like to give you thanks for putting lil' old me in your notes, down there, and I'll inform my fellow loyal if somewhat diminished readers that I shall, of course, have that... other story up eventually. I tend to pore over my works and stare at a page wishing for words to appear even more so than Sky, I'm afraid.

Now... as to the story, I am dissatisfied with your swift dismissal of the in itself, describing not even a flower in a beautifully decorated vase resting atop a mahogany table in the far left corner. I mean, all we really know is the name, the location and that the innkeeper has a strange fixation with silver coins, as any innkeeper does. Yeah, not really much there. You described the room of pillars and sorcerers adequately, so I would assume you are capable of describing a castle atop a hill, surrounded by fortifications, and then move on to display before us mesmerised readers the magic of the English language. You’re capable of it, Sky. I would like to see you show us the full extent of your imagination. 110%, as it were.

As I have come to expect, the grammar and spelling are as good as they ever were, and I do enjoy reading on the misadventures of Biggs & Wedge. Yet I really do wish you would devote yourself to your work. I can hardly be one to ridicule your work ethic, yet you ask for my input and I supply it as well and as bluntly as I can. You should well know by now that, although I appear candid in my wording, I have nothing but respect for you and your writing ability. I merely find it a shame you choose not to use it to your full capacity.

~ The Exacting Expectations of the Eternal Enigma

Ahh, the long-absent Biggs & Wedge. From my interpretation of them, I'm expecting to see a grand piano fly out a window and crush them or a bobby (another name for an English copper, for those of you not in-the-know) to pull out a whistle and begin chasing them with a baton through a bunch of doors - with hilarious results, no doubt.
My own little expectancies aside, I like what you have been doing thus far, although I would prefer it if you had a few more... villainous characters in. Not meaning to be churlish, but even the bandits seemed to be generally nice people. You probably have plans for a few antagonists in the future, but I'll just bring up this point now in case you haven't noticed.
On a side note, I hope Guiness makes a glorious return later in the story. I happen to quite like him.

Hey, its been a long time. (For me, not you.) i would have to say that chapters 6 and 7 are good. Not your best, at times I felt like I knew what was going to happen next, but very few in that respect. I enjoy reading your stuff and I hope you will write more.

Signed,

The Wandering Gambler