Short but to the point. Very well done!

I loved this one:
-not one of your fake "great"s, fake "thank you"s, fake "fine"s that always manage to morph me into a seven year old version of myself, having to look into my mother's eyes after breaking her favorite vase.-
and the last paragraph is plain awesome(which pieces are mine and which are yours...)
I can take this explanation!

elenerm

Grissly, hun, you've got to write more!
By the way, is this little fic complete? The last sentence kind of lingers, as if waitng to be answered...
But even if it is one-shot, it still works very well!
You've got Grissom down perfectly, absolutely down to an art, his raw honesty is heartbreaking.

Maybe you should leave it like that. There is something about revealing just enough to have this taste in your mouth, that you want more, but at the same time you're satisfied too...

Lovely--the ending lines are amazing. You put a lot in a small piece!

Wow ! Short, but oh-so-good! What a truly moving piece you've penned here. *applause*

This was a great short one! Is there going to be a follow-up? Hope so! You are a great writer!

This story was powerful with the thoughts of a man betrayed by himself and his heart. The ending was even more so powerful with your one lined paragraph. Simply a delight to read.

Cheers,

Sounds of Silence

Lovely -- You pack a powerful punch in a few paragraphs. I'd love to see a sequel from Sara's perspective!

so very lovely

I really like this. You express the words which were all he ever felt and thought, and though they are few they are honest and him - and sufficient. Thanks :D

"One right turn (after all the wrongs), and I am in front of your building."

LOVED that line... so true, so true. There was so much good stuff in this. What a great poetic look into Grissom's mind.

Great Job!

god, that is absolutely beautiful. Poetic, moving, powerful. I love your use of metaphor - the ocean and the rock is so appropriate to GSR and in particular to Grissom. When i read stuff like this from you, I shake my head and wonder why the heck you don't write more often. Just plain wonderful.

So short and yet you said it all. Great little fic.