The two different perspecttives in this chapter were awsome. I simply adore the amount of detail you put into writing (though sometimes it is a little overbearring. In other writers, this would be too much. But you have managed to put this much into every paragraph, with a nice flow between your sentences that I love it, really, just love it).

The parts I really did like were the action bits. I am biased when it comes to action, especially when it is writen well. It is one of the hardest things to write (for me) due to how technical it has to be, and without that technical element it loses it hold on the reality in your land. Anyways, you did a fine job. If you have any stetches from this story up on the internet, I would like to see them. I'm sure they would add an interesting factor to see how the author actually envisioned their world

The ending on this chapter really is heart wrenching. Good friends, going their separate ways. There is the feeling that one knows that someday they are going to meet again, under different cirumstances. But still, this is the last chapter that I feel that the kids are still really innocent. From Ch9 onwards, they are busy with other things, and growning up.

Great job.

I do apologize for the late reviewing. Your story is terribly underpreciated. For some reason, this chapter reminds me a bit of the teamwork that is so stressed in Naruto (I am sorry if that parallel offends you). Anyways, I do like reading about the social lives of your characters. Things they have to accomplish and work together to move onward. This story covers a wide range of characters and where they are in different stages of their lives. Anyways, I hope you are well and that you continue writing. Thanks

Please continue to update your story. It's such an intriguing plot. I can't wait to continue reading it!

Awesome first chapter. An Interesting start to what I'm sure will be a great story, It's so nice to be reading something that hasn't been done :)

This chapter is awsome. It's really interesting, and really really long, but I like it. Very cool

flip long chappie
welldun gd start

I love your story,love! Its very descriptive and interesting.Hm...it seems that Sakura's seeing the world for the first time. I hope you find some time to update hon!

Again, another amazing chapter.

I'll start with the begining; I love how you started this chapter out. It was just one big showcase at how well your writing is. The characters seem very real, they are selfish, as humans are, and they get angery, sometimes rightfully so and other times not. With this opening bit we readers see just how you like to poke fun at the characters while at the same time making us pity them. Or, if all else fails, we at least understand the motives for their actions. One other thing I truly love about this story is how bluntly you write some of the characters. There is no huge complication we have to go through to finally understand the character, there is no big enlightening where Syaoran might go "Oh! I have been mean and cold all my life. No more! I will be much kinder to all others around me!" The characters change, yet do so slowly and with a greater understanding then other stories exhibit.

I really like the relationship forming between Sakura and Rika. Though Rika is a secondary character, you treat her with respect and kindness, giving her a personality with shape and form, instead of simply dismissing her as "a really good friend." The actual substance in Rika helps the readers connect the story more and also helps you out more, giving you a much more developed character to play around with, given any situation that will arise in this coming chapters of this story. The Rika character also demonstrates how well you treat your story, givng it so much thought, dedication and hard work (I sure your fingers hurt a tiny bit after you write a chapter,lol). The readers see this, and will stick to the story much longer purely because of that.

Syaoran and Meiling are excellant, as I've come to expect, and I would not have them portrayed any different in this story. And in this chapter we finally got to see our first little glimpse of the mystery that is Clow. Abeit, it was a small glimpse, and mostly there to let the readers see what will happen to Tomoyo, but I enjoyed it none the less. Clow seems a bit of a fussy person, but given the glossy-mystified air that has surrounded his character from the begining, we readers expect his character to be a bit off and even dificult to deal with. He is like Darth Vader in the first movie of Star Wars (the 70s ones). We see him, we see how he deals in response to the actions of others via Luke and Hans and the other people oppressed by him, but we don't really know him until much later. I assume that is how we will come across in the dealings with Clow and his apprentice (basically, whatever you come up with will be great).

Sakura's character is also evolving and I do like how you are pushing her to examine her ideals and morals. The burning town scene was writen beautifully, as was the struggles of the burning people. I've notice how the paragraphs are slightly smaller than they were at the begining of the first chapter, which says to me that you are really thinking ahead at what should go in the paragraphs and leaving any useess detail or unnecessary thoughts out. This could still be improved upon, but given how long you've hinted the story is going to be, I'd say you have plenty of time.

One bit of critic; during the first half of the scene between Meiling and Tomoyo where Meiling recieves a letter, it is a little confusing as to who is talking. I do get annoyed at the constant, he said, she said, of other stories, and I see that you've avoided much of that, but there it might have been helpful.

Again, fantastic chapter; a truly fattening chapter of characters and questions, with a healthy dose of irony once in a while. I will be sticking to this till the end.

On a personal note, good luck when school kicks in. Mine starts sometime next month. May the first month or so go easy on you

*Sigh*

I finally finished chapter one! Every single word of it (@_@) And no, you didn't scare me off =P Hehe. I know what you mean, I don't like writing stories in just one or two specific genres. And I tend to go on and on too... LOL, anyway, I love this story. It's very interesting and an original AU. I'm definitely looking forward to reading the rest =)

twenty-nine chapters, wow!! that's alot. don't worry i will try to update for each chapter u update even if it is a bit late like this review. so hurry and update cause this story is very interesting. i'm looking forward to the romance in this story ^_^

Your story's been flowing along quite nicely. I do hope you update soon and explain more of what's REALLY going to happen.

Till then,
Hikami

Ever try reading chapters 2-5 in one setting? My, gosh. Not only do I have bloodshot eyes, but lower half is almost completely numb. But it was worth it!

I do like how you moved quickly through the years. Three years have passed and the story is diffenly now moving onward toward its goal. The begining was long and dragged out, but it diffenly helped to set up this elaborate world you've created and its rules that the characters abied by. By now, the readers will won't need any exaplanation for simple things, and we can just except it and continue reading. That is a marvalous feat. Congrats.

The relationships between the characters is also growing, which is nice to see. I am stilly extremely happy that you are not suddenly overflowing with romance during the last scene, which is what any other author would have done. Instead, we readers were introduced to an actual 'fight' between elements, which probably will be extremely helpful to know later in the story, I'm guessing.

Great job.

Again, an excellant chapter.

The introduction of Syaoran and the rest of the gang was refreshing. Not only were we readers introducing to the characters using a completely different set of adjectives, but you also avoided (for the most part) the over-used and boring descriptions ("Dreamy/intense/golden/amber eyes" ...ug, barf).

No romance! What an amazing thing to acomplish with an introductory chapter. What I can tell with this story already is that you will not substitute characters and story for simplicity. (For example, Syaoran is not a complete and utter jerk. He does seems silly, and annoying, but understandably so.) Meiling's maturity really does come through.

One more great point is that you write the dialoge with the maturity suitable to the ages. The kids are not simply going to talk childish and silly and say such things like, "I wonna go sleepy!" (which is not only disgusting, but also a distraction from the story) for the sake of trying to get the point across that these are small kids.

Great job

Alright, this first chapter is really an amazing feat. Not only does it introduce the protagonist, but it also shows a fantastic talent for action. Abeit, it is a bit taxing on the eyes to read one large paragraph after another, but you helped with that by making lovely little spaces inbetween them all. Thank you.

I love this story. The originality of it is stunning. At least, for FFnet, especially CardCaptors. This story is one I have been hestitant to review, for fear that it might turn out to be too good to be true.

And, boy, am I glad I have been proven wrong