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| Hell-of-Fire 2006-04-09 ch 1,  | abuseI so LOVE this! It's great, it's hilarious and fitting! I just love it! |
| SG1SamFan 2006-03-03 ch 1, | abuseThat was very, very good writing. I loved the parallelism between Kara's thoughts and Lee's--"I would fight to my dying breath to protect you, you beautiful bastard. I thought you knew that," and "I know you’d fight to your dying breath to protect me and I’d do the same for you, you beautiful disaster," and also: "Why aren’t you walking over here, grabbing me, turning me around and kissing me? Get over here and possess me mind, body and soul. Make the world disappear until only you and I exist," and "All you have to do is ask. Turn around. Run to me. Throw yourself into my arms and give yourself to me, mind, body and soul." And through my gratuitous use of quotes, I'm trying to say in my awkward way that I think you have a real handle on the characters and their thoughts. Just excellent. Now I'm off to read some more of your stories : )... Emily : ) |
| Tracyj23 2006-02-27 ch 1, | abuseHey, redundant is good. I do it all the time! I think you really were spot-on with their thoughts there - at least the way they acted, the nuances on their faces said exactly what you wrote here. And man, do I really hope that last line comes true - because there so obviously IS an 'us' for them. Great work - I liked it a lot. :) |
| essence of light 2006-02-26 ch 1, | abuseShort, sweet and perfect characterisation. Nice work. If only we could know what the character really thought. This works. Very Well Done. Thumbs up! essence of light |