Oh, could this chapter be the climax? Or at least a mini-climax of sorts? I'd say this is an important turning point in the story for sure.

It never ceases to amaze me how often in fiction, the two sides of a potential couple always seem to be the last to realize that the other loves them back. Seeing as Raine and Regal are adult and not teenagers, I shouldn't be surprised that one of them would finally get it...and boy is the outlook uncertain. While I imagine there is a small part of Regal happy that she seems to recepricates his feelings, it's rather clear that he doesn't know what to do about it. I also liked how it ended before we really dive into what the two of them are thikning right after that. It leaves me really wanting to read the next chapter and finding out!

"'Now go to sleep before I make you!'" Yeesh, harsh, but considering that Genis brought up the Presea bit and what Zelos said right after, not at all surprising.

By the way, I also thought it was really cute how you tied this into "Ordinary Day." It shouldn't be surprising since it says right in the summary that it takes place in the same timeline, but I liked it nonetheless. Plus it serves as an interesting contrast. Here are two young people already together and tying the knot, and yet there are these two older people clearly into each other and yet various circumstances prevent them from acting on it. Furthermore, one of them seems to have figured out that the other one likes him back, but is too stunned and confused to do anything yet.

So yeah, if you couldn't tell, I really enjoyed this chapter. It's probably one of my most favorite so far. I have no complaints and see nothing wrong character-, grammar-, or writing-style-wise. Keep up the excellent work and I hope you'll write the next chapter soon! I really want to know what happens next!

Yay - new chapter! Well done and please update soon!

After months of not having read or reviewed any fanfics, I finally decided to start again!

I was pleasantly surprised when I saw that you updated this story. After over a year since the last update, I thought you may have gotten busy and abandoned fanfic writing. Good thing I was proved wrong.


In case I haven't said this yet, I think you are doing a good job pacing the romance here. The gradual increasing closeness of Regal and Raine is natural and realistic. I especially liked how Regal surprised himself by being able to fall in love again, being happy about it yet thinking he can never act on it. That really seems like something he would think and do.

I also found Raine's thoughts after the graffiti found on the school to be interesting. So she thinks of herself as a hypocrit, preaching on behalf of Half-Elves, yet secretly hating that she is one? It's a different way of looking at Raine, but it's plausible. Of course, seeing the school she and Regal worked so hard to make a reality desecrated may have made her think such bitter thoughts. It was something she hoped would aid in making Half-Elves more accepted, yet the old descrimination is still there. People can just as easily think things they don't mean when they're upset like they can say or do things they didn't mean.

So yeah, I’m still really liking this story and really becoming more open to the Raine/Regal pairing. Your writing is excellent, your depictions of the characters are spot-on and the storyline is still keeping me interested. I hope you’ll be able to write the next chapter soon! ^^

On related note, I've only seen one instance of RxR flirting in Dawn of the New World so far, but I'm about half-way through. What's funny, though was that I saw it shortly after you updated your story. XD

This is a really amazing story and beautifully written. Please update soon!

When I read this a few days ago, I was all sad because it seemed like you were on a pretty long hiatus, and might've even abandoned this story. Imagine my surprise when I found out you updated(!)

Both chapters were excellent! It's nice to see that their relationship is finally getting somewhere now; at least they're past admitting the attraction to themselves (now, to admit it to each *other* - somehow the idea alternately makes me LOL and squee inside)

I think I've mentioned it before, but you've really captured the characters' voices well. I was a little hesitant with the intensity of Genis' anger; but when the idea came up that they would have to settle down (in Altamira, of all places!) when they had Iselia to return to- it kind of fell into place. *Love*

Can't wait to see how you'll be dealing with Presea and Regal! I never shipped them, but your interpretation is nearly heartbreaking, and I'd love to see how you'll resolve it.

Another good chapter! Please update soon!

Well done! Please update VERY soon!

I don't know how, but you've made me fall even more in love with this pairing. There's something about the way you portray them that really conveys how grown-up they are; and that maybe, just maybe, are both a little bit (a lot) lonely.

I've never really seen Regal and Presea in a romantic light either. You just make it so heartbreakingly tragic.

I.. I think I love you for this O_O

On the contrary, I think your romance is very well paced. Not rushed in the least, and certainly not dragging. It's exactly what I think one could expect from characters such as Raine and Regal.

And I'm loving this story so much, I just had to leave a review before I finished the whole thing. Really, you've captured their voices very well. Especially Regal and his politeness. And Raine with her air of grown up maturity, balanced by her temper. That small tiff they had at the end of the first chapter made me grin, if only because I could totally picture them doing so.

Okay, back to reading!

Hey, remember me? See, I finally did get around to reading one of your other stories!

Serene: At least you got to ONE of them. How long ago did you say you'd read that girl Tabby-Katt's other stories?

Uh...just be quite! *Mutters something about annoying Lucario-Muses*

Well in any case with the semester over and having finally gotten my compter back after taking it to a friend's father to get it fixed, I can finally start reading and reviewing fics more frequently.

I must admit, RainexRegal isn't a pairing I really considered much before. It's not that I don't think it's possible, it's just not one I really think much about. RxR stories tend to be rare, too. This one though is really making me see the potential between these two. It seems normal for the both of them to be feeling attracted to the other and mentally chastizing themselves for it at the same time.

I was thinking that Presea should've grown since she herslef said that she felt her "lost time coming back to her". I suppose though that it makes for better drama what with Genis distraught over her still in twelve-year-old body.

And of course, your own writing is just excellent. The character are portrayed just supurbly. No awkwardness or out-of-characterness at all, even considering that it takes place five years after the game. I did spy some errors (mainly missing letters like "an" when I'm pretty sure you meant "and")but your writing style, descriptions and dialougue more than make up for it. I shouldn't be surprised I though since I loved Ordinary Day.

Though it's only been four chapters so far, I'm loving this story as well and anticipate the time when you can write more. I can now add your to my Favorite Authors list along with this story. Hopefully I can get to some of your other stories, too. ;)

Howdy there. I'm adding this to my Favorites, and to Story Alert.

The dialogue and descriptions are seriously mostly top-notch. I most certainly can't complain.

I think that you DEFINITELY need to change your summary, though. I'm not saying that it sucks or anything, but it makes the story look as if it's not as good as it really is. Your fiction is a lot more complex than the summary lets on to.

Please, continue this whenever you get a chance. I'm hooked! When your writing makes the reader feel something- anything- it's a good thing. And your work is definitely doing that to me. Makes me feel sad for Raine and Genis, disappointed, a little angry, and quite a few other things. Just don't rush things, and this will turn out to be one of the best ToS stories out there- I'm sure.

Keep up the great work,
-KK (Manna)

Awesome- page breaks! I'm reviewing as I go, this time.

First, a comment on the age gap. I think it's great that your parents are 10 years apart. I love hearing about things like that working out. Why? Because I'm interested in a guy 14 years older than me- he's 34. Personally, I feel that there is nothing wrong with age gaps- so long as the parties involved are both in love with each other, and that the guy isn't going after the girl just because she's younger.

My preacher and his wife are...gosh...many many years apart! They've been married a long long time, too. He just hit 80+, and she's in her late 60's, I believe.

People complain, but a long time ago, that's the way things were. Younger women married older guys. Why? Because women can only have kids for a certain period of time (without complications...they say you should stop at 34 or something). So 10+ years was NOTHING! I don't see how that wouldn't be any different in this case. Raine is such a smart woman, and has been through so much (as so has Regal) that I believe it makes perfect sense.

Okay, good going with the speech. I would have taken forever to write that. I'm not so good at such things! You wrote that exceptionally well, I think. So good work. Raine's comment about the eggs was rather depressing if you ask me. I'm surprised that you didn't delve into Regal's thoughts on that particular matter. It's pretty sad they're lucky to have even a few people listen (most of which are half-elves themselves), and if not, then they get [insert food here] thrown at them!

And I quite enjoyed reading Regal's thoughts on Raine while she gave her speech, and on Raine's thoughts about what Regal might be thinking of her. I wonder why Genis doesn't like it when she shows her ears like that? Makes me wonder a lot, really. Why would that bother him or make him uncomfortable? Aside from the fact that that is usually what gets such a bad reaction from the crowd, I mean.

[He was plagued by the utter depression he felt at the image of Raine and Genis standing on a stage addressing an empty room.] Seriously, that was the best sentence I've read in a long time. Be encouraged! The whole paragraph was beautiful and inspiring- to me, at least.

It's sad in itself that Raine and Genis have become accustomed to that happening. Imagine what Regal would do if they got pelted with tomatoes.

Wow, so Presea can draw now?

When Regal asked Raine was he should do with Presea, I nearly fainted. The poor guy! And poor Presea, too. For any and all reasons, of course. The poor girl doesn't know what's going on, and Regal doesn't really, either. That just breaks the black hole I call a heart.

Are you trying to imply that maybe Presea has a crush on Regal? Or that maybe she feels sorry for him? Or maybe she doesn't know what she feels?

This was a great chapter, truly. It's been a little while since it's been updated, but that's okay. I'll read the next chapter now. :)

The last bit of this chapter was really amusing. You write Regal and Raine alike very well. I'm impressed! Actually, this whole chapter was great. And long, too! Bringing up the concern for Genis and Presea was a great idea. Definitely a good thing. I hope all that works out!

Who cares if there are other well-written fics out there? If you don't continue, then there would be one less good one out there.

I found this highly amusing and well-written, for the most part. You should try to read over it- lots of letters were missing (for example, at one point, it said Bryan instead of Bryant). And after Mr., there should be a period. :)

Otherwise, this was good so far. I, personally, am rather interested in seeing what will happen next. :)

Ah! You updated.

(Note: I'm reviewing as I read, so I won't miss things)
You've got some missing words. No big deal, but I thought I would mention it anyways.

"Hoping against hope that it wasn’t Presea; she felt guilty." The semi-colon feels out of place. Try replacing it with a comma. If not, add more to the sentence to make it feel like the SC should be there.

"It was only fair that she help him if it was advice that he needed, after all hadn’t she gone to him about Genis straight off the bat?" The semi-colon would probably be a better fit there, instead of the comma. It makes the sentence seem to flow better.

"They were both starved of adult company that much she understood." Should be a comma between "company" and "that".

"Yes technically Presea would be in her thirties now, but she was still a child in many ways." Commas again xD After "Yes" and "technically".

"She glanced off when his eyes met hers." Ah, I know how that feels >.<

"He felt a pleasant tingle down his spine as her eyes widened" Again, another very familiar feeling.

"“I’ve thought of nothing else since you got here.”" Oh, I HIGHLY doubt that *snickers*

"Raine the idea started with you" Comma after "Raine".

"Regal I couldn’t turn down an opportunity like this even if I wanted to" Comma after "Regal"

"Raine was going to be his partner and that sort of conduct toward a lady wasn’t appropriate especially in the world of business." Comma after "partner" and "appropriate".

"He’d found it all too easy to appreciate all her fine assets" AH! A pun!

And poor Genis at the end...my heart goes out to ya boy. *refrains from singing "Love Is A Battlefield".

Anyways, great chapter Yams! I'm sorry if I seemed a bit harsh up above, but...my grammar nut side came out. However, this was a good chapter, setting up to where you want to take it. And it did it very well.

*squeels because he knows one of the next scenes*