Reviews for Tales of KOTOR: The Onasi Legacy

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Prometheus71 2006-04-30 ch 5,	abuseI have really enjoyed this Onasi Blaster series, and I am sad to see them come to an end. This was another great fic, and a perfect end to the series. I loved the scene with Bastila and Carth-I thought you conveyed Bastila's worries and character brilliantly! I liked the family crest on the blaster-that was a nice touch, as was Carth passing it onto Revan as his legacy to her, and token of his feelings. Well done, again, I have very much enjoyed this series, and I hope that at some point that you do another one ;)
Kendoka Girl 2006-04-22 ch 5,	abuseThat was a funny part where Carth gets slugged. Carth's inner doubts really resonated too. You can see how he suffers from what Saul and Malak did. Good transition to Carth and Bastila. It might have been nice to put in one short blurb describing Revan's fight with the remotes. I love how you show the concern that Carth and Bastila have for Revan. Revan's guilt is well done too. I could just see the Onasi crest on the blaster - it was wonderfully described. That letter was heartfelt too as was Revan's departure. Well done. That was a great story.
Kendoka Girl 2006-04-22 ch 4,	abuseThe sense of tradition and honor that go into the first part really came off well and I got the feeling of how important the blaster is to the plot. Nice writing of the areas of the game just before the Spire is attacked.
Alexandra3 2006-04-20 ch 5,	abuseKind of sorry to see this finish up, but I think you've done a good job with it. I have to admit that when I was first trying to write this out, this chapter was the exact scenario that I had. I think you read my mind! I must say though, that I think parts of it felt a little disjointed. The brief moment of her fighting with ten remotes really felt like it came from left field to me. And even though Carth is under a lot of stress, I felt like he was having more mood swings then Revan was. He kept blowing hot and then cold. Regardless though, I really did like this series. I love how you tied the blaster into each one and made it a part of the story. You came up with interesting stories too about where it could have been and how it went along its own journey (That sounds a little cheesy, but you know what I mean). All in all, well done!
Dragon Scales 13 2006-04-20 ch 5,	abuseZww, tht was sweet. I wonder where the blaster goes after Dustil, though...
Bald as Malak 2006-04-13 ch 4,	abuseI like father-son stuff at the beginning. For me, it fit quite nicely with the whole theme of this set of chapters. There was a nice sense of warmth to it. Sometimes, that sense was taken away a bit by telling us what people were feeling, rather than "showing" it. For example, "It warmed him and he felt himself coming to miss his home before he could even leave." Adding a bit about what Carth feels physically would make this a lot better. Even changing "It warmed him..." to "He felt a warmth spread through his body" or some such... The second part could have used a bit more focus. The first part is nice, especially setting up Carth's realization that the E.S. is under attack. On the other hand, I think you've tried to put a scene there where Carth's life is saved by the blaster, but it doesn't really come through, in part because of how easily they beat up the previous group of Sith (and so the Sith don't feel that threatening) and in part because we are quickly distracted by the CarthXRevan dynamic (which has so much history it's easy to start looking for stuff there). Still, the whole bit about applying the kolto patch was nice. Most stories (including mine) just say "applied medpac" and leave it at that. Here, kolto and good ol' regular healing get their due ;) Good story and series. BaM
Bald as Malak 2006-04-10 ch 3,	abuseCooking now... I like the bit where he realizes that he just doesn't care... nicely described (during his confrontation with Lashowe). Great bit describing a resistance to a Force push: "She sent a wave of the Force to throw him off balance, but he accepted it and walked through it." Nice use of the Onasi blaster. I'm wondering where this fits in time with the first chapter, in which, I think he comes to have 2 of the blasters... Nice add of Yuthara, though the arm around the shoulder bit didn't work for me. Too familiar too quick (unless you add a bit to explain it), plus it seems a bit too friendly to be doing in front of Sith they are seeking to escape from. Good stuff! BaM
Bald as Malak 2006-04-10 ch 2,	abuseI love the introduction of Ulric as a character, and how he is different from Carth. You set up this potential jealousy between them, but then tell us that they are so close. You need a bit that explains the discrepancy. Great battle scene, how he struggles to survive but finally can not. Nice ending in which the blaster returns to Carth. Sweet done, quite sad. BaM
Bald as Malak 2006-04-10 ch 1,	abuseI'm confused, because I thought I had left reviews of the first two chapters, but then when I looked for them, they were not there... ::shrugs:: This first chapter is great fun, and a nice way to start. Dark and gritty, a nice ending with Revan and Dustil. Good stuff! BaM
Alexandra3 2006-04-05 ch 4,	abuseI'm glad to see more of this series! I like how you detailed Carth and how he got the blaster, especially how his Dad told him how he got it. I thought it was rather endearing actually. It's such a wonder to just think all that one blaster might have been through... which is why I am loving these stories. I'm also amused by your Revan and how Carth just knows that she's "Definitely not one of mine." Great line. Overall, nice piece, can't wait for the next one!
Trillian4210 2006-03-30 ch 3,	abuseThis review is way overdue, so sorry. But this one is my favorite so far. Your battles are always so clearly rendered, as was Dustil's characterization. “Seems they enjoy playing ‘fetch’ with her bones.” What a great line for a baddie. Well done!
Kelli 2006-03-21 ch 3, anon.	abuseHey dude, this is Alice's friend, Kelli. She's off playing in the sandbox and sent me a blurb for you. - Great description of Dreshdae. You really bring out the feel of the place. It reminds me of the Dark Horse comic that had a story about Korriban. Dustil's thoughts were well done and I could see him musing over the death of his friend. The politics of Sith training were excellent too. One minor thing - I believe the term is 'rain down punishment.' Dustil's transition to knowing that the Sith were evil was another wonderful part. He prods Lashowe so well. Great scene at how Dustil walks through the Force attack. This was definitely one of your best chapters.
Prometheus71 2006-03-04 ch 3,	abuseI always wondered what would have happened to Dustil had he stayed at the Sith academy after Revan and Carths visit. Saved by an Onasi blaster-that was a great touch! I really liked this, and I am so glad that Lashowe finally got her comeuppance (never liked her in the game), and I am also glad that Yuthura (as she is one of my favourite K1 characters) saw the light (so to speak) and left the academy with Dustil. Great fic!
Trillian4210 2006-03-02 ch 2,	abuseVery imaginative explanation for this one. I liked Ulric, but for some reason I couldn't help but think he should have been Carth's older brother. Random, I know, but I think it's because you portrayed Ulric as a seasoned soldier. Anyway.. Nice personalities on his partners and that Gen would likely be killed (as you had her) for being so brash. Nicely done, and I look forward to the next one. :)
Kendoka Girl 2006-03-01 ch 2,	abuseNice family dynamic you have going. You can feel Ulric's pain at being the black sheep. Nice idea with the dropships. Great scene with that and with the battle that follows. The ending was very poignant and well done. I loved the aftermath when Carth gets the blaster.

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