There sure wasn't a whole lot to this story. It would have been nice if you could have lengthen this to the size of a regular size in the series. And it seems like you aren't carrying on with this story.

I like your story so far, but it's very difficult to read. You need more punctuation. The sentences seem to blend together, and the quotations aren't very distinct. You might want to correct it. If you don't know how, you could look for a beta (editor) or read some of the many resources on the internet about proper punctuation. I really do like the idea of your story, though.

it's a good start but a bit TOO much like the real series. update soon

I hope you won't be too offended by this review, as no offense is meant.

It's a good storyline, no problems there.

But you might want to work on your grammar a bit. The thing that really jumped out at me was the several occasions that you didn't capitalize the first letter in a sentence.

You also might want to change your summary. It is a very long run-on sentence and might drive some people away.

Just a couple suggestions.

Carleton

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Update soon! Good first chapter!