If Sharloc knew that he was ogling the daughter of an intergalactic felon he might be more covert. :D It's only a matter of time before Vegeta catches him in the act.

This story has become absolutely epic, which is both good and bad. Good because it's mult-tiered, engrossing, and keeps me wanting more, and bad because it isn't finished, it hasn't been updated for 5 years, and it keeps me wanting more. I found myself getting a little anxious when Trunks was conversing with Sharloc for the first time. The conversation went on longer than was necessary, I think. I was thinking, "Come on - get to the good stuff! Both this chapter and (so far) this story is nearly at an end!" But, if this story had several more chapters that helped reach its conclusion I don't think I would have been so antsy.

This story is one of the best I've read, and it leaves me with butt-loads of questions. Will the Confederation capture Vegeta? If so, how will his family help? Will Serive get the help she needs to battle Kouruji? Is that really Goku's spirit he's captured? Will Serive kill Relov? Will Sharloc catch a glimpse of Bra in her underwear?

I do hope that some day you'll rediscover your interest in writing this story and see it to its conclusion. There are surprisingly very view DBZ space adventure stories out there, and even less that involve nearly all the characters. If you had been finding that writing chapters is like pulling teeth, I would suggest shortening non-essentional dialogue. The conversation between Trunks and Sharloc for example could have been greatly shortened. Shortening side-stories, such as Paresu's stint as Tradvenuer, would also help. Again, I hope that one day I'll see the end of this fantastic story. In the meantime I guess I have to fill in the blanks with my own imagination.

Good short chapter to keep even those not on the ship connected with the story. It was also a good opportunity once again to examine relationships such as Marron/Trunks and Bra's crush on Goten. I wouldn't have gathered that Krillin was disillusioned by the afterlife. Yeah, he quit being a monk after he died, but he didn't do that until over three years after the incident, round abouts after the Cell saga. I figured he quit being a monk to marry 18. I'm curious to see if these soldiers intercept MARC in the next chapter!

I'm glad you include these interludes of Vegeta's and Serive's history between chapters. I really enjoy reading them. Vegeta and Serive are very much alike. It's no wonder they don't get along!

That was good, but I do agree with you. It was long, and I think unnecessarily so. There was several paragraphs devoted to describing the outfits of the Rattepian royal family in great detail. Descriptive writing is great, but I think it would have helped to just limit it to the description of the wedding dress, which was the only truly relevant outfit. Overall, I think most of the conversations between characters could have been trimmed down a bit.

Their first stop on the scrap planet was great. The surprise at the end of that segment, when the aliens revealed that they were playing dumb about not knowing standard, was hilarious! I laughed out loud. Same with Vegeta's rules on etiquette. Ha ha! Well, he is a prince after all.

I did like how this chapter is in keeping with the established motif of relationships, engagements and weddings, and royal duty. Way to keep it tied together!

Oh I KNEW Ghelain was going to do that! This story just keeps getting more and more interesting. Best chapter yet!

I did notice a few mistakes. Near the beginning of the chapter when Serive is conversing with Bra, Serive repeats the action of putting her doll in her right pocket. Also, near the end of the chapter, Creogin is referred to as Lauvern.

As usual, great interactions between all the characters. It was too funny when Serive fell into Vegeta's lap, and the flashback conversation between 7 year old Bra and Vegeta was absolutely adorable and yet kept everyone in character. Team Dragonball - hilarious in-joke! :D Ha, I had a feeling that Creogin was going to use the phrase "they have their ways" when asked how the confederation could overcome and capture Frieza's dangerous ex-soldiers. Great addition of an interfering third party element. I am so excited to see what happens next. Please oh please finish this awesome story!

I like that there was a little info about her experience with Frieza. It helps to clarify her hazy dreams and flashbacks. Depicting Frieza with a more or less male, human set of equipment is pretty typical in fanfiction, and I think it could have been a little more creative. He is an alien after all, and his perfect form looked neuter. For all we know his sex organs could be in his tail. Also, you described Zarbon's skin as periwinkle, which is a light blue-purple. I think aqua was the color you meant. Anyway, good interlude. I hope to see more of her past and how it involves Vegeta. I'm curious to see where his animosity for her comes from!

NOW Goten pops the question! It did seem as good a time as any. Besides, how many can claim that they proposed in deep space?

Great chapter, one suggestion though. It would help to double space or add a few dashes in between different scenes. It was a little confusing at times to tell when a scene ended and another one somewhere else on the ship begins.

It's about time! Serves Goten right for lying to her for so long. Poor Paresu. I'd be pretty pissed too if I was being so obviously kept in the dark. I like that you took it upon yourself to round out this underdeveloped GT character for your story. Like I said before, it's fun to see the uninitiated experience all this for the first time! I must say, I did think for a minute there that Goten was going to propose to her, if only to change the subject yet again! As usual, great interactions between all the characters.

AWESOME backstory! This is so intriguing. I had a terrible feeling the moment it was mentioned that the pillar was housing an energy as prisoner...that's Goku's soul, isn't it? This would put a whole new sense of urgency into this mission and make it more personal than the Z warriors could have realized. Goku's very existence could be in danger, and Vegeta could well be outclassed by Kouruji's new found power.

This is SO interesting! Oh I hope this story gets finished some day. By the way, I like how you created the name Relov from lover.

This story just keeps getting better and better. I absolutely love the way the Briefs family members interact with each other! They're too much fun. The ping-pong-game battle of wills between Bulma and Vegeta concerning the bathroom was totally hilarious! I love your portrayal of Bra too. You went pretty in-depth with her character which not many other fic authors seem to do. Your Bra is how I would expect a teenage daughter of Bulma and Vegeta to act like.

I loved it! The lying session with Paresu was hilarious! It was really funny to see Vegeta of all people trying to stifle a laugh over the Greenland Mafia. The whole part when everyone was trying to figure out the doll was intriguing and creepy. Reaching the end of this chapter only makes me want to read more and see what happens next.

About your author's note, you're right about the nature of Saiyan hair. Toriyama said himself that a Saiyan's hair grows after being cut, just not past a certain length. Kinda of like monkey fur! Makes sense. -

That was a little less exciting and a little more introspective than the other ones. Very good though. Serive's formulating plan with the tea and her magic powder have me very interested to see what happens next!

That was another great chapter. I liked that you took the opportunity to elaborate on Vegeta's and Serive's history. One thing though. Frieza is white only in his perfect form, and in his first form he is kind of a lavender color with a strange, horned helmet-like form around his head. To my knowledge, Vegeta had only heard rumors that Frieza had other forms until the battle on Namek. Still, that was a really interesting chapter. I'd like to hear more about their past!

Very, very good! I like how her control of Trunks was re-introduced. While she won't have control of him for long, the others don't know that. Way to bluff!

One thing I meant to mention in the last chapter. Your descriptions of Yamcha and Krillin didn't seem to match what their ages should be in this time period. Krillin had gray hair and a mustache in GT, but here his hair is black like it was during the Buu saga. He doesn't seem the type to bother dying his hair. Also, Yamcha would be around 63 years old here. I wouldn't think a person at that age would be playing professional baseball. Yes, his martial arts training makes him stronger than the average human, but he still ages. Anyway, I think that should have been brought up. Speaking of age, in this chapter Bra is 17, but in earlier ones you said she was 16.

Aside from that, great story so far. I like the side story of Paresu's slow initiation into this strange circle of friends, and I loved the photo album scene!

That was a really fun chapter. I like your OC. She sounds really cool looking! I also like the believable way that she, someone who is physically weaker than many of the Z fighters, could get the upperhand over someone like Vegeta. He's arguably the most powerful one there, but his strength doesn't do any good if Serive is so fast he can barely land a punch. Her use of magic and her use of Trunks as leverage were pretty good tricks too! I love stories that involve Vegeta's past connections. Again, great chapter!