“Raja? Are you alright out there?”

“I hate you.”

Rofl.

I really liked this chapter. I feel like I'm getting in deeper and deeper but with no more answers than when I started. Just more questions.

I might be missing something, but I don't get what happened to make the school kids even remotely look like terrorists.

“How did you find it?”

Blu blinked, “I looked.


Brilliance. Sheer brilliance.

" like that thick feeling in the air just before a thunderstorm"
- I really like this. It doesn't strictly make sense in a literal way, but I know exactly what you mean and that makes that line even better!

And I really like this imagery:
"He opened his eyes just in time to see a single snowflake float lazily through the air."

I love this new character, Blu... at first I thought it was Jonny, but I guess that was silly to assume. But he seems very deep and well done.

And Jessie kind of seems to be the one with... issues. Anger issues, primarily.

OMG. I can't believe I've never read this! I love the dialogue and the interactions between characters. And I love "Frog" for some reason. Not the character (he's mean) but the nick name that they gave him.

Also, everybody thinks that what they wrote 10 years ago was bad. People who succeed are people who constantly seek to improve themselves and never accept their current state as "good enough."

I'm sure I've read your previous stories (heck, we've both been hanging around the ML long enough), but I can't recall which ones were yours and not other people's off the top of my head... but this one at least... wow! I don't know what the dialogue was like before, but it's definetely realistic now. I've never been a big fan of inner dialogues at all, but the spoken dialogue is of a much higher grade than... I don't know 90% of the people on .

Very intruiging. I had the reread the chapters to refresh my memory, but this story has definitely got me on the edge of my seat. So Jessie has secured John's help for Blu. It will be interesting to see how that works out since Abby is out o0f the picture.

In the meanwhile, I couldn't help but feel sorry for Hadji, it seemed like everything that could go wrong did in this chapter. I'm still trying to figure out who is manipulating who here, but that is all part of the intrigue and that is also why I still have your story on my alert list. Looking forward to more. :)

UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE!
i live for these updates thought u had got lost or some thing glad to see you found your way back to the keyboard.
The stroy still feels like it is building up with every update a little bit of information is given...but that means YOU NEED TO UPDATE MORE.

I love it so far (here's hoping there will be updates) - very rich imagery, and I love how detailed you are in putting together the framework of the story. It's very rare to find someone who's done research and languages, cultural slang, little things like that that take a simple story and make it come alive!

Let me know if you need a beta, I'd definitely be interested!

I think Abby went too soon. I wish I could have gotten to know her better. Still, I know it had to happen. Poor Jessie. Too much emotion and turmoil for her. She feels like she needs to be strong for Blu, but it's Blu who's being strong for her.

As for Melana and Anaya, well, it's amazing how you can get me to love Anaya and then make me suspicious of her and start not liking her very much. And what's with this "I've found you, Benton Quest!" deal? Answers please!

Can't wait for the next chapter or ten.

I should have reviewed a while ago, and I'm sorry for not doing so. Especially since all I have to say is praise for another great chapter! And yes, I'll be getting to the next chapter for a review immediately, as well.

Anyways, I think what I loved most about this chapter was the interaction between Dr. Ross and Jessie. It was very fun to see how easily Dr. Ross could fluster her and show that she's not all tough. Usually she manages to keep up her front. Even Jon has a hard time cracking her, but Dr. Ross did it so easily and it was so fun to watch. ^_^

Of course, the cliff hangar was pretty good, too, dang you. Good thing you came out with the next chapter pretty darn quickly. Now, off to review that one!

Hadji sure has a lot to deal with... I wonder if he can read those signals he's getting? Your character interaction is spot on and you have left me intrigued yet again.

I also like that you have made Hadji a strong character. More please. :)

Wow! What an awesome chapter! I LOVE Hadji's and Anaya's relationship and interactions. I especially loved Anaya's tears at the end, which make her seem so much more human and relatable!! This was such a great chapter!

It's nice to see Hadji kick ** every once in a while, and his first encounter with Jessie was nothing less than fun. I can't wait to see more of the original Quest Team meet up and get to know each other and see how they all interact with each other.

And though I'm not a Jessie/Hadji HR fan myself, you write it well enough to make it actually enjoyable to read! Great chapter, can't wait for the next!

I love your ability to set the scene and the way you have developed these characters have me wanting more. Especially loved the interaction between John and Jessie in this chapter. More please!

Glad to see that you updated this story.

You definintely have a very interesting plot going on here and I'm looking forward to seeing how this develops. And just why exactly is Blu late? Hm...makes you want to know more! :-)

Good luck and hope to see another update in the neat future.

YEA!! An update! You know, I didn't pay attention to this story the first time you posted it, but I am really enjoying the rewrite. You have a such a way of writing a compelling story without giving away too much information. There's so much mystery and suspense in this story and I'm just dying to find out more about each of the characters!!

And you write Hadji and Anaya, so well! Over the years I have definitely developed a greater appreciation of Hadji, but you just write him so irresistibly well!

Can't wait for the next update!