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I haven't read the story yet but OMG! The name just hit me because I made a character with the same name:

BIO:From NYC but her family decided it would be better for them in Toronto but never told her why.And she still says whatever problem they had must have been serious to have to leave the country.
Name:Micky Ricardo
Personality:Very outgoing but only with people she knows and a little shy around strangers shes very sweet & sincere.Shes also clumsy and a bit of a nerd.And she has a problem with saying the wrong things outloud & a straight A student.
Hobbies:Singing in the shower the main reason for that is she never has & never will hear herself sing.She likes to play lots of sports.What girl doesn't love to shop not this one she lives for it.Eating she never turns down seconds.
Appearance:She is of african american & latino decent she use to be really short for her age when she was 13 but now she is 5'6.Very skiny witch she hates.Nobody knows what her real hair color is because shes always changing it.Her eyes chang colors from green to brown and sometimes both at the same time.
Age:16
Family:She has a great relationship with her mom & her sisters Anne,Eva,Christina.Christina the oldest is ok with Micky Eva second oldest her & Micky are like best friends,as for Anne who was only older than Micky by one year annoyed Micky so much always stealing her stuff & thinks shes right even when shes wrong.And her father well not so great hes always wanted a boy and being the youngest of four girls he was hoping that boy was her.He even tryed to name her Mikey but her mom changed it to Micky.
Friends:She used to hang out with Jay & Alex when she was 12-13 but got some sense.So know she hangs out with Emma & Manny shes kinda friends with everyone but Emma & Manny are her best friends.

uhh a little suggestion..why dont you put in speach marks and actually subliminaly state when the concersation switches between two peopl like her and mum then her and her best friend..would make it easier to read

I like your story but you should put some space beween the people speaking because it's alittle confusing to read at least for me.

You need quotes so that readers know what is just a thought and what is being said also, tell who is talking. "Blah blah blah" said Mickey ... and then add an emotion or adjective/action ... jokingly, with a smile, annoyed, rolling her eyes, etc. That's just for starters. You have to develop your own style. And in response to that other stuff you said ...

Don't worry about it. I get negative reviews all the time. The best thing that you can do is to keep writing. I've been doing this for like 4 years now ... my first ones were really bad and more superficial--mostly about O-Town and other pop stars. You'll know if things sound realistic or good enough, but just take risks and keep writing!!

Niki Lo

Capitalization is good. Proper punctuation - including quotation marks - is also good. Realizing the difference between "your" and "you're"? A blessing, as is spell check. Details are nearly as wonderful as coming up with a decent, original storyline.

Unfortunately, you fail at all of the aforementioned.

I don't think you understand. What makes a fanfic, a fanfic is the fact that it's based on the previously created work and it's characters, not when it's revolving around a character that has nothing to do with the characters, apart from being "new" to the town. You've created a Mary-Sue in the very first page of weak, uninteresting dialog, that's supported with very weak verbs and adjectives, infact you can't tell the difference between them. I can honestly tell you that this story will be no different than the other 60% of fanfics on this site dealing with Degrassi or any other fandom.
Let me explain because you don't seem to understand from my previous review...
New Person (usually a girl) arrives in the fandom world, New Person has a "problem", New Person makes friend with fandom character, New Person makes more fandom friends, New Person hooks up with one of the favorite Fandom characters.
It happens all the time, the plot is overused and dry. New People are boring.

Quotation marks. They're a GOOD thing.

proper formatting, something you obviously don't have a grasp of. There is no plot development, no distinction between action and dialogue and you're focusing on a character that has no relation to any of the Degrassi characters. You have a really poor story in the makes...