Sorry everyone I've just had a lot to do. Aside from vacation, martial arts, summer school services, work, book reports, camps, baseball, and I'm on a traveling paintball team that has tournaments every weekend so I just haven't had the time to write up any chapters. So sorry everyone but that's how the ball rolls for me.

Hello again,

You still havnt written the new chapter! What gives?!¿¡ :P

I havnt had anything good to read, and have resorted to replaying metroid prime 2 echoes... THAT GOD DAMN SPIDER GAURDIAN! Any tips on how to defeat him?
Or should i just not bother and take the spare car battery and some jumper cables so I can fry the damn thing. :P

Sorry about giving away a whole chapter last time :P i'll be more careful next time...

Yours, in anticipation,

Kronkle ^_^

Hello there Mikenator!

you keep complaining about running out of things to write but i think what youve written so far is pretty good. a few gramatical errors here and there, but I'm willing to over look them due to the fun, fast paced, and funny story line ^^

Just couple of ideas if you want them:
Jumbo gives chase with a small fleet of gunships, but Samus' ships computer, Adam, has detected a little extra weight, taking in account of the suit, onboard and after joking about it with Mike and Samus, thinking they may have been over-endulging on their little vacation, goes onto say it could be one of many annomelies but thinks in particualr that it was some kind of planted device.
When Jimbo's fleet shows up it becomes obvious that there is a tracker on the ship some where, but Samus and Mike realise they cannot give up and take evasive manouvers, and when Jimbo's fleet start blowing up, Jimbo gives the order to fire on Samus' Gunship.
Adam then points out that a large cloaked Battle ship is in the vecinity and it is that that is firing on Jimbos fleet. Samus tries to communicate with jimbos fleet but Jimbo just says your not getting out of this one.
Mike points out the window thingies at an approaching planet or place, and Adam declares that it is their destination. And in typical Metroid (Prime) style, the ship is hit and begins plummeting towards the planet/place/destination.

Then the story switches over to Ridley who, obviously, is in the cloaked ship. The 2 super pirates had been given their punishments for lying and were promised more if they didnt succeed in getting mike this time, and they give chase to the plummeting ship...

Cmon i have practically written a chapter for you ^^
If you like my ideas or not email me at

I started my own fanfic but didnt get too far...

Thanks for reading if you did ^^

Well technically I have a three on three. Heroes are Samus older me and me. When I said only one villian I only meant Ridley because he's an original game character. There still is 67 and 68. So it's a three on three.

well well well, a month and a bit later you've only got two chapters up, well at least they're great so that makes up for it. It makes me sad that there will only be one villan (no-one has done a two heros vs. two INDEPENDENT villans especially if those villans hate each other and love to blast each other to bits, *sigh* I'll just have to keep hoping that you use it for a sequal or something.

More or less Adam is just there to move the story along and so it's not only me and Samus talking. I guess if you want an explaination I guess he's in the ship through program or file transfers or something. I didn't really have a reason how he's in the ship, but he's in it and that's all that matters to me.

You say this story takes place after Echoes, and yet Samus' ship is the new one with Adam. Prime and the original storylines are completely seperate with each other, and thus I am rather confused as to how this can be.
Simply pointing something out.

All very good points, especially number 1.
By the way, I like how you fixed the end of chapter 12, it makes much more sense. And if you ever need more help, just PM me.

Come on, update. I want to see what going to happen. Like if their is love between the you of the fic and Samus.

Uh . . . just for the record, this story takes place after Echoes. Ridley will only be an original game villian. First of all - Summary says "after Echoes" so no Dark Samus. Second- WTF would Jimbo be doing with Dark Samus, he's a GF. Man!
Sorry if I offended.

Hm. Maybe you could get Jimbo to send Dark Samus to get Mike, or maybe soem kind of upgraded Samus lifeform. Very good story by the way.

Good story nice to see that you finaly updated Also Pet metroid.

YAY! U FINALLY UPDATED!Great story. I love space chases!! so suspenceful!! Update soon man!

Good. Nice and twisted, which (for this story) is par for the course.

HURRY UP AND UPDATE! I WANNA KNOW WHAT HAPPENS NEXT! PLEASE!