Compliments, first:

It was interesting... kept me reading...

I loved teh beginning with Kikyo...

Had many funny parts

Loved Inu and Asuka laughing hard...

Criticism:

I won't say much, it is late for one thing and you pretty much would know what I would say about this chapter, grammatically. Though, better than older chapters in that particular area, there were many deficiencies.

Sesshomaru and Kikyo were OOC (out of character)/

Though interesting, it had a kindergartenish look to me... it seemed to rush from one scene to another... and Sesshy was just not the real Sesshy.

I, somewhat, feel Kari and ash have fallen much too fast and much of this chapter I couldn't imagine really happening...

Amd, Ash wouldn't have been able to catch the arrow and throw it at kagura... for one thing, if it did happen, it would no longer have teh same effect as it would when Kikyo does it...

And if he would've done that technique, it would've cut his hands and then slip out of that and rigt to his heart... he would've been better off with Pikachu thundershocking it...

Ash and pokemon parts seemed a bit overdone...

Koga wouldn't know what a high five is...

Sorry for more criticism than compliments... but anyways, it seems like its going to be good. Still lovin' it!

Until Next Time,
:D Smile,
Neo

Way to go. This is a great chapter. All those upgrades the good guys got are very cool. I rather expected Ash himself to ask if his Pokemon were okay after he was merged with them. Thanks for the good job on this.

The only thing i can say is, make a sequal. You did great, but what happens next?

I just surf the internet looking for good stories that match my intrests, then I came across yours. That's how find many other stories in my favorites.

you know, this story is great, oh and as a sneek peek of my chapter four, i can tell you that the Transformers and the Light Speed Rescue Power Rangers are involved.

I'm not sure but this feels somewhat from Zelda. But it's a good chapter though.

Ok..what to pretty WEIRD. Anyway I read the rest of this story, Not bad at all. Well later.

very good job on this chapter. I love how you used all of ash's pokemon.

this is so cool and I mean that in the most sincerest way because it has my favorite animes and plus some others that I am not very familiar.

your fellow author,
GK

great chapter Pete. nI'm gald this story is back on track. I need some advice how ever, do i have just Armogedo moytimon or do i use all three of his forms in the atack

you must write more. you must. this has been a great story so far

O, creepy chapter, but I loved it.

Another great chapter. I just loved it.

i like what you have done, good work. However,my cherecter has one green eye and one orenge eye. he all so has white hair and is very skinny.

Cool I'm in your sotry... I like how you read my profile and noticed I'm from San Fransico. Cool... evne thoguh I do in realife lack a tattoo...