Awesome, I sense foreshadowing... Hey there is something wrong with your computer, because there is no 'Next' button...

AWESOME DUEL! Ahh! Royal-Shipping, I refuse to read anymore. *Secretly clicks the next chapter button*

Chapter One

“…the most traumatising event during this time…”

It’s spelt ‘traumatizing.’

“…targeted by the White Organisation…”

It’s spelt ‘Organization,’ and you’ve done that quite a few times.

Oh, and I believe it’s Polymerization, not “Polymerisation” and “Cyber Gymnast” is actually known as Cyber Gymnastics if I remember correctly. But that’s pretty much it. I may need a heavy load of constructive criticism, but you’re absolutely fine, Snake-san.

Chapter Two

“…not recognise the feelings that he had for…”

Spelt as “recognize.”

Also, I noticed that you constantly spell ‘dueling’ and ‘dueled’ with two ‘l’s when I believe it should only be one.

Oh, and your warnings in the beginning of the chapters have a few spelling errors such as ‘defense’ and ‘characterization’ which led me to believe you typed this in after uploading the chapter.

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And that’s pretty much all the mistakes you made. Far less than I did, anyway. Now I’m going to make random commentary on the story’s plotline because I obviously didn’t just read the story to give you pure criticism.

First of all, you _rock_ for writing an Asuka duel. I personally love her cards, though I’m not quite sure how the Hell she keeps winning her duels without a single ATK-boosting card in her deck. You’d think the girl’s just doing that because she’s canon. _

Edo and Kenzan are in this story as well, awesome. You don’t see them running around in many fanfictions nowadays.

Hey…Edo used Draining Shield! Oh, and Misfortune sounds interesting. It’s not out in the English TCG, is it though?

*goes off to seek after chapter two*

Eh? I thought there was no banlist in the Anime. (Remember the big bitch-fight Meloku and I had on your forum?)

Victory Dragon…hm…I _might_ just try that out sometime. Though obviously I prefer Yata-Garasu over any other hand-lock card.

*reads some more*

Devil’s Sanctuary? Interesting, interesting…

Your prose is so much better than mine and the flow of your dueling as well. I personally think I add to much physical detail into my chapters and completely throw everybody off track while you manage to balance detail and technical dueling quite well.

Hmm…that’s all I have to say now. I apologize if my review was not nearly as extensive as yours but you fanfiction needed a whole lot less nit-picking than mine. I shall read chapter three tomorrow, perhaps.

Till then

*chuckles*. Me likes this one. I had a feeling Misawa had somethin' interesting in his strategy. Heh...I can imagine the scene about whether Misawa would give away his Demise, King of Armageddon. It would look pretty funny.

Anyway...keep it up. Looks excellent so far.

Laterz.

I loved the duel.It ended well.You write great duels.*is envious*I couldn't write a duel for beans.T.THeh,Judai and Kenzan arguing.Misawa has a Dark-attribute deck?Excellent chapter.Oh,I received your e-mail.-You're actually considering writing a duel between Ryou and Asuka?O_OThat's really kind of you.Thank you.Why did you say "Hi.",at the end of your e-mail?Waaiit...Were you greeting Pidge?If you didn't,I understand.If you did,you'd be the third person to say hello and make me and the birds feel ecstatic and special.P.S.-THE BIRDS SAY(cause everyone loves Fubuki)ALOHA!Pidge-san(-)

You're right. You are good at writing duels. That, my friend, is a hard task indeed. *nods*

So the duel between Misawa and Hiruma is done and I'm glad to see that Misawa was the one who came out on top. Now with that duel out of the way I have to wonder what you plan on doing next with this story. Please update soon so I can find out.

Amazing job! It's easy to tell that you like writing duels, and you write them very well!

It takes skill to write something like this, and you seem to have them!

Another fine chappy, exciting duel sequences too. It's like watching an eppy in your head as you read. Nicely done. Hope you update again soon!

Nicely written and well executed. I enjoyed this chappy a lot. Keep up the great job and update soon!

Very well-written. You have no idea how much more pleasant it is to read a fic when it was proper mechanics (spelling, punctuation, grammer, capitalization, etc). Also, good job with keeping all the characters IC-esp. Asuka and Judai.

Well...I have to say...this fic is DEFINITELY a piece of work. I always wondered how to spell the words that Chronos tends to use at times to address a male/female student. Now I know. (So...thanks for showing that in your fic).

Anyway...keep up the great work. Looks excellent.

And...I'm glad that Misawa is dueling again.

Heh,two reviews in one day.Nice chapter.Good description.YAY!Kenzan was in this!I know so little about him.T.T YAY!Daichi dueled!You don't see him duel at all after his duel with Taniya.Poor Daichi.Hiruma has Horus?That's one of my favorite duel monsters.Will Misawa win?You write great duels and I was wondering(more like hoping)if your going to have Asuka duel Ryo.That would make my day to read such a duel.Is it possible to write suspenseful duel?Darnit,I'm rambling again.Keep it up.P.S.-PIDGE SAYS HI!Pidge-san('-')

Interesting.I wonder what the title means.What was dead that is now coming back?I'm lost.Awesome duel.YAY!Asuka versus Edo.Is Edo going to show up later?Fubuki is going to be in this?XDKeep it up.P.S.-PIDGE SAYS HI!Pidge-san('-')