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| Dantaron 2007-10-20 ch 3, | abuse... wasn't the "Why is a raven like a writing desk?" from Poe? >_> Anyway, friggin' awesome story, Sora - I just sat down and read the whole chapter in one sitting, oy. Man. Well, that was so friggin' complete and well-written of a chapter you might as well call each of these individual fanfics in their own right, much less part of a "novelisation" (more like rewriting, lolz) of the games. ^_^ You did an awesome job here, and the Ashtarth fight pwnt hardcore. I like his wind stuff and invisibility things - you pieced that together in a way to make him seem the most formidable knight yet, which is good. The breaking out of the Wind Stone trap was a little deus ex-ish, but nonetheless it was better than the game's version - even though that was lolarious. >__> Said how basically the entire Horizon level post-Ashtarth can be cut out/edited with little to no reprecussions. Also, winged people = pwnage. Anyway, excellent chapter miss Silverwind. ^__^ Let's hope Starlight doesn't take as long. and hay maybe at the end you can sell it to Hasbro or whoever made Bomberman. 8D And rofls, Link/Midna or bust. I'll be reading! |
| Paper Dimentio 2007-09-15 ch 2, | abuseI...I dont know what to say about this story other than AWESOME! You are definitely a talented writer! This story is going into my Favorites! ^_^ |
| AxisLyonheart516 2007-08-09 ch 2, | abuseWhoo, sorry that this took so long. I'ma bit slow, yah? ^_^ Consider this a review for both chapters, 'cuz I'm lazy. As usual, your writing is very detailed and descriptive, and it never takes ya out of the action. I liked the use of your jokes (both in plain view and subtle), as well as Pommy's lines... especially with the whole Supergirl 'conversation.' Very funnah. The long battle with Behemos was awesome, as well as very descriptive (wtf, he don't remember his sister? How sad... -_-), and I loved Bomberman's escape from Nadine with Moira, who is very cute. ^_^. Which, by the way, it's nice to see her origination (is that even a word??). As for spotting the two Act Zero references... I'm not sure on the first one, but was it when Pommy was sleeping and said "he didn't want to be on the Xbox 360?" I saw the second one, with the guards, and Bomb mentioning he's the captive in the slave factory. Yay, me! ... Does that make me an even bigger nerd, now? Also, Bulzeeb's still the badass he normally is. I'm loving your take on the flare between him and Zoniha. Can't WAIT for you to get to Thantos. srsly. |
| Kazukas 2007-03-25 ch 2, | abuseWow, when you said the second chapter was long you weren't kidding! There were a few jokes here and there that I wanted to comment on but eventually forgot while reading the rest. XD But anyway, I did want to comment on that statue of the red-haired mermaid. ..Ariel? *dies* Man, you sure do like to make Bomberman look pretty pathetic, but sometimes cool too. He has like.. that Kenshin-esque morals thing going on, but he's not nearly as independent. The battle scene was pretty damn awesome. Oh yea, and I do vaguely remember mentionings of Moira, I think maybe from reading stuff in the RP comm, guess now I know. :P "Spot the two Bomberman: Act Zero references, and revel in your Bomberman nerdiness." I only caught the Xbox 360 comment. I fail at being a Bomberman fan. T_T Maybe I'll skim through and try to find it later.. or just ask because I'm lazy. |
| Dantaron 2006-08-13 ch 1, | abuseNice. ^_^ It took me awhile to get used to the idea of a non-chibi Bomberman, but I'm used to it. Pommy's cute. I laughed at the part with Lilith. Real-esate. XD She's pretty cool. Anyway. Until I get my hands on a copy of the game, I'm sure this'll do in the meantime: the Astral Knights seem interesting enough, and your creative 'liberties' will probably make it more enjoyable then the game. ^_^ |
| Kalder 2006-03-20 ch 1, anon. | abuseI really liked your story, it was very detailed and good and I'm sorry you haven't gotten many reviews for it because this is one of my favorite stories. Plus Bomberman the Second Attack was my favorite game and I think it desurve a story. I think that all the Bomberman games were good before they came to the Gamecube, all the onesd on there suck. Anyways really kick ass story. |