|Reviews for Undercover|
| Danni 3/10/06 . chapter 1
You need to make it easier to see when you have changed scenes or a period of time has passed. It's really hard to follow.
Also, I find it hard to belive Sam was able to be that active and efficient with a broken arm and fractured ribs at least.
Before that you said her ribs were broken, later they were fractured. I know the first time was more Sam's thoughts but it makes it hard to follow and harder to belive in her capability to move.
An okay effort. I think your stories could improve alot. Keep on writing, I think you will do well.
| sg1 huge fan 3/9/06 . chapter 1
cool story, any more?
| gater62 3/8/06 . chapter 1
I enjoyed it. Will this continue?
| sammie77 3/8/06 . chapter 1
| KatieMichelleBelle 3/8/06 . chapter 1
This was really good. One thing to make it easier to read would be to indicate a change in scene. Sometimes I was half way through a line before I realized I was in a new scene.
Can't wait for more,
| scottiedog 3/8/06 . chapter 1
This was good! I never liked Ba'al! I do not think anybody does! Good Job!