 mojack 2009-10-09 . chapter 1This story never gets old. I've read it at least 3 times and am just now reviewing it. By far the best fukufic I've ever read still. |
 ShineX 2009-05-14 . chapter 1This was an awsome story, nice job! |
 Nosferatum 2009-02-20 . chapter 1Wow, intense. |
 bsmitty 2009-01-14 . chapter 1Awesome! Amazing! Spectacular! Best Ranma-SM fic ever! |
 moritynz 2008-09-11 . chapter 1As stories go i was good. I had to really make myself read it with that Akane crap though. Sorry I know some people like her, and I used to, but now I think having her as an actual romantic interest can kill a story.
Good job all the same. |
 d3jake 2007-08-04 . chapter 1Very exellent storyline and character devlopment. I dont' know what to say beyond that. THough with what happens I need to rethink the plot for my crossover, no worries, I won't steal anything (not intentionally at least)... |
 ShadowCrawler7 2007-05-09 . chapter 1Awesome story. Took me several nights to read it and it is one that is hard to "put down" It is a cool twist on the sailor ranko story and I like that Ranma and Akane got together. All the loose ends were tied up. With the exception of Ryoga still looking for Ranma. Maybe he'll show up at the wedding right after the I do's. |
 t wrecks 2006-10-03 . chapter 1This is one of the best stories. It needs tweaking in a few spots, minor stuff but it is great |
 Blackdex 2006-05-27 . chapter 1Bravo, I enjoyed every moment of this, you actually managed to peg Ranma as a senshi, and do it fluidly, no unnecessary OOCs, no "great turmoil" in which an older Ranma reemerges, its just Ranma, doing what he always does, anything he can to help the weak. Its nice see a Ranma-Akane piece that really works, most just go, well, wrong. I also like how you avoided unnecessary confrontations with the past NWC, their were a few Ryoga Cameos, but their expected, i mean, its a mainstay in the magna to switch to him for a few scenes. On to the parts I didn’t like. You put the whole book in one chapter, boo. Its length was about as low as i can take without complaint and the one and only chapter was roughly what i expected, maybe a little longer than normal, but nothing to complain about. but i do think you could have split it, two chapters at least, three at most. I still read it in one sitting, which is what i like to time it out to, but it was close. I literally could not stop reading this piece, I missed lunch, and my stomach is getting even with me. well, that it for now, i want to see where this story goes, and i noticed its continued by a different author, so I am going to try and hope for the best (read the other authors work as well, none of the Sailor Ranko though) |
 xeno 2005-06-06 . chapter 1 I thought that this was a great story,I have not read the sequels yet but I hope to soon but I think this one would be better than the others.
I would say this has most of the aspects of a perfect story ,and I enjoyed reading it alot.thanks for writing it. |
 Tigger-69 2005-04-22 . chapter 1This is a very well written and very enthralling story. Ranma as always is trying to hide his curse and for once is succeding but this does not make him happy.
What makes this story so enjoyable is not the fact that Ranma becomes Sailor Sol but because he gives it up only to find it is a mistake. The reactions from all the other Sailors Senshi is very believable. The battle scenes are great but the best battle is the last but one which is only words between Ranma and his mother. I like happy endings and although, this may not have been the happiest it is one of the best.
Congratulations on a great story. |
 Bobboky 2005-03-03 . chapter 1excellent, very much so |
 Sopchoppy 2005-02-23 . chapter 1I have enjoyed this story quite a bit. One of the stories that got me into reading fanfiction. Thank you for sharing your writing and I look forward to reading your future work no matter how long I have to wait for it. |
 Nachoman1 2005-01-26 . chapter 1I wouldn't find the arrogance necesary to say my word is the law, but as just another guy reading fics around, I can say this is one of the best "first fic" I've seen in a lo-o-o-ong time.
(I know, That was a great runover. . .)
As plenty of other reviewers have already advised you, breaking down this fic into chapters would have made it a lot easier to read. As I don't have a great deal of online time I had to read it (in my breaks) over a week, and in that much time I wouldn't remember specific details worth a damn. Chapter breaks not only help you "regroup your ideas" (as in review what you just wrote and check for loose ends), to reviewers (or at least to me) they lent a second to do detailed reviews.
Now being more specific on the fic (and in no specific order):
*)The ending left a few people complaining as it was certainly abrupt, but weeding and everything else would have been nothing but epilogue.
*)The plotline involving Sensei Miyagi was lost way into the second third of the fic. So were the journeys of the fiancees looking for the Tanaka dojo. Is good that you didn't forget the fiancees to do a good ending, though.
*)Is nice that you always kept the comic subplot of Ryoga being lost. By the way, was there a cameo of "Hitchiker's guide to the Galaxy"? I don't quite remember, it was like four fifths the way down.
*)So Ranma was (as usual) real strong by human standards, but barely into the realm of power of the Sailors. I did like that because very few people realize that he tap into his own power, while the Sailors tap into the magic field of nothing less than PLANETS. Paraphrasing Ranma in a different fic "the Sailors are like big tanks while us (regular warriors) are commandos: they can do great damage in very little time, but it is us who can moderate our hits and do precision work".
*)The bit about there being an unofficial Sailor Scout in the Moon Kingdom, Sailor Sun, made sense. What didn't make sense was for you to make her be reborn as Ranma, and then Ranma actually needing to become female for Sun to awaken. An explanation (or even some iddle theorizing) would have been a nice conversation topic while Ranma and Akane where stuck behind enemy lines.
*)Thermos flasks (not even the best) aren't that good at keeping water warm. Might have made more sense if you had said something like "I already located a convinience store a block away, and I could easily get a cup of hot water once both me and 'Ranko' are known factors around the block".
*)I agree with Ghost that it is nice for a change to find a Youma-Overlord who manifests a slight quantity of brains.
*)About Nodoka being OOC, I don't trully agree. You are a fanfic writter, and writing fanfics is about fixing stories (or characters) as you see fit. Now I don't agree with her spitting on the ground instead of demanding seppuku . . .
*)You did "cut corners" on this fic. But then again, it was your first fic. Somewhere is that everyone begins.}
*)It seems like you didn't have that much of a background on either Sailor Moon or Ranma. Such conditions makes for rather interesting omissions from cannon; adding freshness to the fic.
*)My time is up. Anyway, I wish I could have made a full review of your fic. |
 Natara 2004-07-12 . chapter 1I really like this story. :) Very well done and the way you put Ranma into the story was VERY believable. I'm actually rather impressed. ;) I think I'll look up some more of your stories... |
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