I stumbled upon this story when it was at chapter 11 and I must say: You don't mess around, don't you ? Wholesale slaugther of dragons and people, antimatter bomb explosions, space fight action galore ... very nicely done.

I'd like to know what's going to happen now - so get your backside in gear and finish it.

I have just two questions:

The first question is about what happened to the second bomber assigned by the Crosseyes to the Southern Continent? Did fall under the table (so to speak) or did get destroyed together with the bomber for the Northern Continent ?

The second question is about what are you going to write when the Second Fleet Command Group is contacting the Pernese - are you going to write "take me to your leader" somewhere ? :)

Hi,

You've done a fabulous job with this story. I hope you haven't given up on it. Please continue.
Judy

Hi
I just read your story it was very good.

"Updated: 02-24-08" -What is that?

Huh?

That is the last time you updated your story, Mr. Mercenary.

I feel that now, six-and-a-half months in the future, you should update.

C'mon, please?

This is great, will we get more, please?

Great! Next chapter?

Sniff, it is so sad. I hope someone survived.

"For everything there is a season and a time for every purpose under heaven." Someone famous said that I think.



it's out of the bible. corinthians i think, though it'sdefinitly new testament.

Great! I love the Dragon/ploit thought speech. More please.

I just discovered your story (after Chapter 11). I love it! This is some hard core sci-fi action that you're writing here. In many ways, you seem to be out-writing Anne herself. Good job. I can't wait for more!

This was a very well written story, sad but well written. Please finish it soon. Poor Pern never catches a break, does it?

Very good chapter. I like the way this is going. Please continue the good work.

Tried reading this after a post on a Harry Potter message board got mer thinking about the Pern series again, and this was one of the few on that was long enough to get into, and had an interesting premise.

Sadly, while the concept was intriguing, the actual execution is dreadfully slow. Eleven chapters and 34,0 words and the first skirmish isn't even over yet?

Seriously, you need to make the chapters longer, and you need to pick up the pace. The initial concept was intriguing, but I started having doubts when you went from having one clash (between the Pernese and the newcomers) to a three-way cluster f*ck. I may check back after I see a 'completed' flag on this one, but not before.

good stuff. I am very excited to see what happens to A'rak and his dragon, and to see how the leaders of these two human groups will come into contact. It seems like the "fliers" should have more communication with their main ship, though. Wouldn't they have a superior officer directing them? Nice interaction with Ruth and Lessa. Oh, I love Ruth! Hopefully he and Jaxom will save the world again.

I think I can speak for everyone when I say: alien critters messing with my brain = not a happy thing.

Oh, no... Falsner... That's unfortunate; I liked him. *sigh* A noble, courageous sacrifice, though. At least we can continue to think well of him posthumously.

Just a heads up, but... You say "It wasn’t so much the fact he just heard an odd voice in his head, but more the fact that it was giving him a direct order, as odd as it sounded. These kinds of voices tended to suggest, not direct." However, it IS a suggestion: "I suggest doing something that will destroy that Vessel, instead of just flying around in circles, silly human."

I dunno, maybe I interpreted that part incorrectly, but it just sounds... odd. Contradictory.

Other than that, very good. I'm enjoying this story quite a bit. No worries about the wait; I understand how time and circumstances occasionally conspire to create irritating situations.