I have got to know whats going to happen next! You cought me on your hook now please reel me in!

Okay, not to hurt your feelings, but...

This story lacks so much!

You've left the readers hanging, without so much as a note to say there's more to come. If this is the ending, then...again, I say, it lacks so much.

There was very little to begin with, the conversations are too chopped up, there's no flow, the discriptions aren't strong, and the character reactions really don't have any emotion.

I hope you'll take this as helpful information.

Best of luck with any future work.

Is there going to be anymore? I really like it!

Love how you started the story I hope to see more. Keep up the good work.

Great! Keep up the Good work!

Interesting way to start. I'm intrigued. Please update soon.