Thatwas so sad... :'(

That was amazing! You know if you just changed the characters but kept the same concept you could publish as a really awesome short story.

This is a very lovely, very lyrical story, much like an ancient fairy tale. You have done a wonderful job with this! Thank you so much for posting it.

HDKingsbury

This is so beautiful and tragic.

OMGOODNESS! I LOVED THIS PHIC. LOVED IT.

You know what I loved so much about it? It was dark, yes... but the moral of the story! A good, inspiring, optimistic, heart-warming story! I don't think I've ever read a morbidity phic that left me feeling.. more hopeful at the end, one that made me realize there was a point to all of the madness... love! That it is possible to be kind to one's neighbors and care for them.. This one put me in a more compassionate mood, for sure. I absolutely loved this one.

I loved the rhythm of the story, the repetition.. really effective style. It felt very much like a fairy tale.

I absolutely loved how you characterized everyone. Erik did seem a little.. naive for Erik, but given the story, it worked. It really did work. His actions, at least, did feel like him - selfish and a bit of a thief. I, of course, loved how you characterized Raoul - enough Raoul bastardizing already! You gave us the wise Raoul, the one who's grown up from his headlong youthful ways. I don't think I've ever quite seen a Raoul so wise, so compassionate.

I liked how Christine was in all of those things.. the tree, the birds.. :) Good symbolism, she could definitely be symbolized in all of those things.

This phic got my first place vote (and the beauty award vote, and maybe a couple of others). You deserve it. :D

That was...beautiful. I love the way you weave words. This story was so compelling and romantically tragic. I was hooked right to the very end, and left wanting more. Great job!

All I'm gonna say is that this phic won the morbidity contest for a reason. I'm not sure how many times I can tell you that this is amazing, but here it is again: This. Is. Amazing.
ALL Yours,
Angel!

That was a bit of a heart breaking ending.I almost thought that Erik was going to lose it in the end.Glad he didn't though.My heart goes out to Erik in this story.Good job.

Beautiful. Wonderfully, totally, completley beautiful. The last line just sticks with you, it's so... beautiful! Great job, I love it!

Wow. That is all. Wow.

This is fabulous.

"It had beaten itself senselessly against the cage, to death."

Although this idea has been used many times, you captured it in a beautiful way. I can see poor Erik stare at Raoul, slowly understanding what he's saying.

This is a wonderful fiction piece and I'll put it on my favourites list. Don't we all need some reminder from time to time how wonderful fairy tales can be?

Bravo.