What is happening to poor Tanty? And why is Cori and Tanty yelling?

for the neck thing witch is witch ? i like the story so far. well then, i quess i'll keep reading

Please update. I want to know what happens to Demeter and Bombalurina.

I just love this fanfiction! It's really great and I hope you haven't given up on it. Tugger and Munkus are done so wonderfully. And I agree with everyone else in saying that Tantomile and Coricopat are great. This is a great story. Please continue!

It's just so good. I really love the way you portray the cats especially Coricopat and Tantomile. I like that you portray them as almost one instead of two very different individuals. That they finish each others sentences. Wonderful. PLEASE continue writing and don't give up the story...

This story is quite excellent! For once, I'm finding a Cats fanfiction where the characters are not so horribly OOC. Coricopat and Tantomile were portrayed fabulously. I've never actually read a fanfiction that instilled an actual feeling of foreboding, and even fright. The "He Sees Us" monologue was extremely well-done, and truly gave a desired effect upon myself.
I also hope you haven't forgotten this fanfiction, as it seems that it's been a while since you've updated. It's really a great fanfic - I'm still waiting for the next installment! I just hope you haven't completely given up on this story.

This is TEH FABULOUS. More please.

Once again, another good chapter. ^_^ I did think the whole "oh, the pain!" thing was a bit over-dramatic, but it could just be me. A couple of grammatical mistakes, but apart from that, fine. ^_^ I'm looking forward to next update.

I love this story I do I do!
So now that you've finally written,
I shall review!
Okay sorry, couldn't resist myself. I enjoyed how you portrayed all the cats except for, maybe, Coricopat and Tantomile. This is just coming from someone of whom they are favorite characters of, so you can just ignore me. Once again, I think you could rewrite a Mary had a Little Lamb story and still have such a marvolous voice it would be adored. I also like all the relationships that you've created. Great job and I can't wait for more of this story!

*Deep Breath* Has this story just been updated? FINALLY a new chapter! Freaky Ciro and Tant. I love the way you portray Tugger and Munkustrap in this. It's so... Perfect. Good job and thanx for updating. P>S PLEASE update soon.

Third Chapter:
“Now stay.” He hissed.
should be
“Now stay,” he hissed.

I'm very much enjoying Demeter and Macavity's relationship, and how they act around each other. There is such a great history between them. I also like Bombalurina's reactions to everything. And OUCH, that bite has gotta hurt! I love your Macavity. Sort of... Hannibal Lecter-ish. :)

All in all, I'm enjoying the story. Any questions or anything, email me. My address is in my profile.

Second Chapter:
Space key needed: "the Jellicle Ball, and everycat," "an’ Growltiger hadn’tswung"
Mini-Pollicle: Jemina
Too much capitalization: "A Grown-up queen indeed," "healthy, Even for him"
Needs capitalization: "Victoria grove," "mac," "munk," "Bloomsbury square," "terror of the Thames," "macavity’s," "‘tiger," "hidden paw," "napoleon of crime," "‘sides," (it's in the beginning of a sentence) "thames"

Okay, so your Mungojerrie and Rumpleteazer-talk needs some work. Sometimes it can be a bit difficult to understand what they're saying, if you follow me, especially when they're really butchering character names. "d’ronamey," "bomba’rina," and "d’mentah" should first of all be capitalized, and then written out to clearify who they actually are. The readers already know that Mungo and Teazer have accents. It's fine to drop the h's and g's at the end of words, perhaps to write "ta" instead of "to," to make us get the point, but when you have to squint and tilt your head to be able to read what they're saying, then you're pushing it too far. :)

Oh joy, Cat Morgan! I love Cat Morgan. Just had to say that right away. I'm glad he's in this. :D

Here we go with story number two! Okay, so this nitpicking will be done per chapter.

First of all, you might have to consider correcting the mini-Pollicle in your summary. "Dementer" is... well, it's kind of amusing, really. Perhaps I ought to incorporate that one in OFUC. :) Also, the title ought to be "Precious Metals," with a capital M, and "Yorkshire" and "Pollicles" in the summary ought to be capitalized as well. Other things that should be capitalized are words like: "Jellicle," "London,"

Prologue and First Chapter:
I love the introduction! It gives us a really good insight in the Jellicle psyche and I just adore it. Though if we're in Egypt, what are people doing carrying sacrifices down the streets of Budapest? Budapest is in Hungary.
Sometimes you forget the Space key. Like when in "to be thatthe tribe." Keep that in mind.

Great story, please please please continue to right. I live how you portray Macavity as not having an overblown temper. It is more of cool and deadly.

Okay, KEEP ON WRITING. You have an amazing talent. What a wonderful build up. I think - this is just a suggestion - that you should clarify Demeter's and Macavity's previous relationship and also where she stands with Munkustrap. Just a thought.