Hi! Nice Fic! Could you continue? Please?

whether you know it or not,you've created a marysue*.its unoriginal and boring.reli,its disgusting.plz stop writing,for all our sanity's sake.

*Mary Sue are females inserted in a fandom so that the author (generaly female) can relate to said character and better imagine herself being a kickass ninja and conquering the heart of every male character. She is usually so beautiful it hurts the eye, more powerful than any god that exists, shy and gentle and cute with everyone, makes the evil, twisted and psychopath characters become nice little lambs that only want to be forgiven, etc. Usually, people don’t really like reading about someone else’s sick dream or fantasy, which are Mary Sues. Keep it in your head folks, and everybody will be happier!

yup,sry A-chan5,i copied it off you,but i had 2 spread the word!

That was AWESOME! Go Mei and Shikamaru! Yahoo!

whoa! Mei kissed shika-kun...TWICE! WOOSH! i'm so happy! i'll miss this fic...man your mean! whay cant you go on thursday?! it aint any fun without you! *sob sob* anyway, see you soon! ^^

maybe u can up the rating and put in some lemon *smiles perveresely*

nice man i give it a 10 out of 10

It's getting longer and longer O_O
Well, it's still okay *thumbs up*
see ya and update soon!

Hm... you must be sad. I mean, about the reviews. But you know, people also read... they don't always review ^^

This story was nice by the way.

Oh, and maybe it would help if you don't make OCs... not that I don't like it, but other people dislike it. They like the real characters from the show.

That's what I noticed. The ones with OCs are the ones who don't get much reviews...

I liked the the letter from Neji and the nine words ^.^ The most unexpected thing for me was her brother pushing her out the window(jejeje) Hope you keep writing soon!

Hi! This is pretty late, I know...but I am back! ^_^

First of all, I have a few mistakes I spotted while reading, and being a good friend, I would this opportunity to tackle them:

1. "...on the shinobi's right just to be exact..."
-Hm...I would advise you not to be too exact on the location of which a person/whatever is going. It triggers a little awkwardness and no one likes TOO much detail. Wanting good imagery is okay, but describing things in minute detail can render the readers bored. >.> (Sorry, I just needed to say it. Luckily, you manage to keep your readers interested by putting in pairings, pasts and the like.)

2. "They rested a little recently and talked to each other, getting to know more about one another."
-Perhaps the word you were looking for was "occasionally"? ^^;; If you say "recently" it means they rested - let's say - just a few minutes ago when what happened here was something that happened in the past.

3. "Whispers and glares always were because of the youngest child in the Agurashi family. Despised and not minded, ignored rather, by six of her seven older siblings, and causing some of the worries of her parents, young Agurashi Mei sits alone in her family's garden, watching the wonderful looking butterflies fly around their garden's fragrant flowers."
-I liked this. ^^ It enables thge reader to visualise the surroundings in which Mei is in, but you can still improve on this, if not just a tad bit more, like...include the description of the garden or whatever she's in. But once again, not in minute detail. And try using shorter sentences - the longer your sentences are, the more you are prone to having mistakes. But nevertheless, I liked it...

4. "The eight brothers and sisters were standing near a set of stairs in the living room floor of the house of the Agurashi family for they have heard unusual noises from the second floor. The wallpaper was torn in many parts of the room. Wooden furniture such as tables and chairs were broken. Everything made out of glass or anything fragile was broken as well. The windows' curtains were torn just like the wallpaper. No matter how anyone would describe it, one word may put all the descriptions simple... It was a disaster. Blood was everywhere, too. Blood was on the walls, on the furniture and on the floor... The floor... was where Mei's parents lay... They were dead."
-Ooh, nice...I really like the descriptions you used with this scene.

5. "Sumirei knew that Kurei was telling her to jump out of the window which leads to the back of the house."
-Hm...you should notice that this happened in the past. Therefore, to keep the flow of the story coming, you must stick to the timeline in which you are writing.

6. " It was really hard to get rid of those masked people..."
-I fell for this mistake once...please refrian from uing words like "really". It makes the sentence sound...shallow. >.>

7. "Mei didn't understand. What was she supposed to do? What did the Mizukage want her to do? Why did the Mizukage want her to do this? Why did any of this happen in the first place?"
-I liked how you wrote this. You portrayed the feeling of confusion and sadness nicely right there. Excelent job.

8. ...Nice to know that you used a bunch of wrestling moves to make a fight scene...put a disclaimer next time. You do know that if you don't it's considered plagiarism - and plaigiarism is bad~... >:)

9. "Take this, you bastard!"
-Whoa!! That made me laugh and shout, "Go Mei!" XD

Well, that's pretty much it! Overall, it another great chapter, fresh from the oven-- I mean...from your hands! Yeah! ^_^ Well, that's all for now. See you in the next chappie! ^_^

Hey I try to review its good good i like the end with Ritsy-chan

KYAH!

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MIKO! miko's there! and tenten there to! but more importantly, you put shika-kun! SHIKA-KUN! KYA! *squeals and faints* me wabs shika-kun! and she kissed him! wosh! shika-kun...is soo hot

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lalalalalaalallalaalala!

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*sniff* man *sniff sniff* you make me proud man! i was so touched! i laughed, i cried, heck, i even went to the bathroom! hehe...you always end up amazing me. you lived up to my expectations. i'm soo (sniff) proud of you!~ your the best man! the best!

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soo...is hwoarang cute?(the one here)can you discribe him to me in full detail? so i can draw him? please? my friend? PLEASE!? and oh yeah, what happened after shika-kun saw mei and hwoarang fighting? what did he do? can you tell me? what happened next? hm?!

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its soo sad! when mei graduated from the academy no one was there to congratulate her! that's just sad.

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i hasve absolutely nothing to say xept...I LOVE IT *hugs*
miss you pplz! see you soon!

Dam... It's getting longer and longer...

Anyways, still nice! Whoo! I'm just reviewing! (*overly hyper*)

Update soon!

hey there! cool chap0pie! hope you make more! O_o i wonder what the next one is about... oh well...^-^

~see you space cowboy~

It was nice how they met although that leaves a lot of unanswered questions like why did they Mizukage do that? what was the reason? and How did Shikamaru ended up there or what happen with the Mizukage's son? (yeah I know. a lot of questions ^.^) Anyways does Ritsuko know about Naruto and Mei's past or not?( the story was good hope you write soon ^.^ BLOD BUAWJAJAJAJA)