he really did ?? lol!

well... very good! excellent dialogues... sads...

But u shouldve added more feelings-break our hearts!

HQJ

CONTINUE WRITING!

interesting. Not too mushy, which is good. My fave character is Mercutio, and I get sick of all these Ben/Merc things. So annoying. But FINALLY here's one I like.

This is wonderful, lovely lovely LOVELY writing. A brilliant story, and you've really made his death beautiful. I think it's great that you've focused in on it, and everyone knows that BM actually happened. I can feel the love in this! :)

OMG! This was AMAZING!

:)

OMG! was this song caleld Mort De Mercutio? cuz if it is hold on...

*screams in the background* OMG I thought me and my friend were like some of the only ppl who have seen that musical...its so sad...i cry when i listen to it.

adieu

NO!!





if you kill mercutio, i will diee.
DIE!!
ahh.
i loved it.
so sweet.

Hmm... Well, some of the contractions could be ironed out. Can't changed to cannot and suchlike. But all in all a rather pwerful peice.

xD Pshaw. Mercutio's got nothing on Hamlet for a long death scene here. I think Hamlet rattles on for half a page in my Compleate Works. That's quite a while. He proclaims himself dead a few times throughout. Mercutio's not that long in dying at all.

Perfect! I like your style. Write more Love Clieo

Oh that was so sad! But it was still nice and sweet. I loved the flow and the language, especially this line: No, Mercutio had always been the brave and strong one. Crying was a thing for girls. But there was no bravery to trace near Mercutio now. It was really well-done. Poor Benvolio and Mercutio.

Oh, that was sweet... I should not cry. I should not cry. Andzia, stop being silly, stop crying... *Andzia yells: MERCUTIO DIED!* I love Mercutio.
Good story, I must admit, good to read. Try mine: Blood Tastes Like Metal.

Good story. There aren't enough Mercutio/Benvolio. And isn't it funny that in musicals, when people are dying, they have to sing a song while they're dying, which, if it were in real life, the person would have probably died while singing it. And about the movie you were talking about: Mercutio's last thoughts probably were about how no one believes he's dying. What a way to die, with no one practically calling you a liar. But enough ramblilng, please write more.