GET TONKS AND HARRY TOGETHER!I will cut you

I'm guessing that the girl that was following the trio has some creature blood and knows that Solieyu is a vampire much like he know that Loopin was a werewolf. Now on to more pressing issues. Again I found some thing wrong with your story. In the last book at the end you said that Luna was going to Egypt with her father and that Solieyu was going with them. Now I can see Solieyu coming back early to check up on Harry, but you have Luna say that she was in a completely different contry and from the sounds of it Solieyu was deffinately not with her once during the summer.

I would like to tell you that I prefer your version of the match and the attack that followed more than the actual book. Great job with this chapter. Your always going to have at least 3 questions going aren't you?

Right, this seemed to be as good a point as any to review. Three and a half stories in, so it should be roughly halfway, based on what JKR did. Right, I've spotted a few small things which annoy me, such as how the diary ended up in the Chamber in CoS-Reopened, even though it was in Harry's trunk. Anyway, the reason you don't ever see the torturous build-ups in fics you read is because nobody else managed to write 76 chapters. The other reason you were able to go so long is because you've completely re-written the Potterverse, starting from before Hogwarts. Realistically, you couldn't have Harry confess his love much earlier, especially with all his confidence problems. Great story, of which I can't wait to read more.

Thanks for writing
Keep up the good work
C-C

I realized that it was actually moody in the last chapter when harry was looking at the marauders map and it showed moody instead of barty crouch jr. going good so far keep it up

That was great. Update soon.

love how you chose the name Whitechapel. happens to be the name of one of my favorite bands.

cheers!

Harry join the teamsters or something? He sure is ** alot.

lol im gbeing random and guess its buffy the vampire slayer XD

good fic,... will you be using all seven books to make your R series complete?

Good stuff! liked what you did with Moody, liked how you dealt with Cedric, didn't like the whole engagement thing ( or implied engagement thing ), but that's just coz i have a thing about people getting engaged at a really young age!

I do hope that it isn't all going to be plain sailing relationship wise for harry and Tonks tho, 4 years with no serious fights or arguments ... ^^. The pacing of the relationship would be more believable and it would give more insight into Tonks ( or more appropriately, how she deals with complex emotional problems ). i just can't help feel that for the second most important character, she's surprisingly 2D still, and is the only thing about your story that's even slightly beginning to ware

Also, i personally would have said harry needs some more long term problems, things that don't get resolved within two or three chapters ( obviously I'm excluding the main plot here, because we already know it pretty much ) but that's just my uncultured opinion

Still, you've done a far better job than i would have ( along with most other authors on this site ). Great work, looking forward to the next book/story

To answer your authors note:

Because most authors on ffn are hormonal teenage girls with no social skills living there like through a mary sue or ooc (mary sueish) character from the books.

Harry just has to be the perfect bf that they've never had and then they can be happy living out their life (sx life included) on this site

Its a problem that buggs me constantly. I have to say how happy i am to have found your story, i thought i'd read all the good ones on here tbh ( although every time i think that the DLP forum saves me. thank god for people with brains ) so the first was a pleasant surprise.

Finding out it was a practically complete full on 7 story series .. made me happy! now i can avoid (the first chapter only usually ) of crp stories for longer

Thanks for that!

I like the talks Harry has with his core magic. Very creative. Boris is a fun original charector. I have greatly enjoyed reading your books to this point. Ever think of origina fics? Well off to the next one...
Mae

Him turning into an octopus is way cooler than the gilly weed. I've never read someone do a re-write of the lake challenge but you did it perfectly.

I have to agree with your AN, it was an awesome build up. Thank-God it finally happened and very well written. :D