This story made me laugh. Well, it was closer to a giggle. Anyway, happiness!

And no, not "too much dialogue!" Tell the inner voice from me that it's good as is.

This is an absolutely perfect amount of dialogue. Ignore that inner voice. : )

(I love how they talk to one another. It made me giggle the entire way through. LOVE THIS.)

That was adorable- and what an interesting, hilarious premise! And don't worry- barring falling into script form, I think it's pretty difficult to have too much dialogue. (I may be biased: I love writing and reading dialogue, but still. The story flowed naturally and well and was charming all the way through.) You wrote a wonderful piece and I am very glad I occasioned upon it today! :)

Oh my! This was quite wonderful. Humorous *and* refreshing; I quite enjoyed this original twist on our favorite story. I love that Jareth is bound to take anything and everything that is wished away to him. And making a game of it to irritate (and see) the Goblin King truly seems something that Sarah would do upon finding out about it.

oh, didn't i review this already? ooops.

brilliant and very funny! me likey. a lot _

Oohh...that was actually pretty good. I need to think of that, I wonder if this is real. I had only thought that it worked on children...but hey, I so love Jareth!

It's not too much dialogue. It's really lovely... It makes me laugh. I'm awful pleased with it...

Ahahaa, "Kiss me you fool!" Ohoho, I love it! Funny from beginning to end!

well I've was sitting, waiting, wishing you believed in superstition...then maybe you'd see the signs..

love this song, love the story.

Absolutely adorable and definitely not too much dialogue. Jareth and Sarah are very in character. Sarah teases Jareth relentlessly, and he is gets so peeved. I'm not sure how old she is in the story, but she is believable as a highschooler testing boundaries and seeking attention. It's great to see something not angst riddent, and the end is sweet.

I really enjoyed it, I was smiling the whole way through :)

Aw, cute. I liked it very much.

Awe so cute _

That's so sweet!

Short and extremely cute! I loved it!