I like this! Original!

Somewhat predictable, but sweet. Thanks for using grammar and punctuation!

Thanks!

Yay!

A happy story with a sweet ending. Very cute!

xox the mit

aww how cute! i think the between bit was gd! because it sounded like she went searching just for her rather than just running around looking for anybody. GR8 STORY are you gonna write any more?

Oh well at least the dragon didn't die.

I like the second ending better - also, I'd like to get to know more about the lead character - you've made a good start to a great story!!

Ive read both versions and like them both. but I do have to disagree with Crossover Queen. Dragons can go between without a rider, but it isnt advisable, as they need a clear destination visualized by either their rider or another dragon. A young dragon has the potential to go between, but apparently its unsafe as there were recorded accidents of dragons and riders re-emerging , not in the sky but in solid rogk, or half in anyway. which I think killed them. I'm not sure which story that reference was in. but it was definetly in the REAL dragon series. Also the wild Fire lizards from which the dragons were engineered were always popping in and out of between without human help.
anyways I liked your story.

I liked your story.
Maybe a bit more could have been added to the story line when Lanlia went back home after her Fathers death.

wow, i read in a different fanfic that when they didn;t impress they went between. Its sought of instinctive.

once again, another really excellent read. I would love for it to continue. but only u could make that decision.

Once again a superb read.

Oh, that was so cool! I wish I could be a dragonrider... This is a perfect example of a hatching! I think you should write a longer story with a continuing plot. You could use this one, or write a whole new one. I just know it'll be awesome!
Good luck and safe skies,

Sellena_Silvia88

I definitly liked the second ending better, I agree about the going between, i think your second ending showed more of an insight into how the weyr would react to a hatchlings suicide

Love it! Though it's a little bit confusing, but I still get it!

That was a wonderful story! I loved the original, and the second version is okay for all those nasties who want everything so canon. lol. To them I give the big fat raspberry and the notion that hey, Alternative Universe and fanfic here, author's choice. humph.

I honestly think that is an intersting concept, of the dragonets searching between for their riders. The original is so poingant because everyone knows a between dragon riderless is a dead one; and then she pops back out, showing her devotion to her rider. That just chokes me up reading it, lol.

Keep up the good work!

kristin aka kiara alexis klay

I lovely start to your story.
I hope you write some chapters soon.

That's beautiful.