Again, just got a chance to read this.

First of all, I love Elwood writing letters. Thanks for that! It is one of my favorite things in the world! Great stuff.

Again, constructive criticism (with a hug saying I love BB fanfic of all sorts!)

I agree with some of the other comments made. All boys school... the OC overshadows the boys. Yadda yadda...

First off, I think that original characters are FINE. And pushing the limits of canon is FINE! But if you want to play with canon, and write things that are Alternate Universe, or are not "correct" - then really push the issue. Make it obvious that you know that you are pushing the limits, or dragging the characters out of characters, and make it fun and outrageous. Make it sarcastic or biting. Make it so that the reader isn't expecting canon material and is then disappointed when it isn't canon. Make it so that they are reading about the main characters, but then slowly get introduced to the original character. Eventually, they may come to read sequels for that character, but you have to start with the boys first.

This is all very hard to do, though. But it is doable. Keep writing and working at it! More BB fic, please!

This is a BB story only by the skin of it's teeth. Scratch that- it's a story about some girl who for some bizarre reason a whole bunch of fully grown men bend over backwards trying to please, which doesn't make any sense! What in blue hell is their motivation? You write about how fantastic this girl is and mention Jake and Elwood almost as an afterthought. And when you do mention them they aren't even in character! Not to mention the complete butchering of an entire band's individual personalities.
I just couldn't read this- Dani just isn't interesting to read about and Jake and Elwood obeying a 16 year old girl's commands is just freaky and makes them totally pathetic.

You! Out of my category!

Okay, that may have been a bit harsh, but I still hereby charge you of Sueishness in the second degree. (You've avoided Sue One because your Sue is not a love interest.) I can't even get past the middle of the first chapter. There are AUs and OCs, which when fine-tuned and thought-out are fine, but this is neither. This is pure Mary Sueism and tampering with cannon. For one simple reason that ruins any possible reason for me wanting to read more:

St. Helen's was a BOYS ONLY orphanage. Any dingus knows that...have you actually SEEN the movie?

Awesome!

Great work keep going! :)

Excellent work, keeps getting better and better! If you need anymore help drop me a line.. :)

Either Travel Woes or Road Woes.. What do you think? :)

hey i think this story is pretty good.

i was going to do a story with a blues sister but decided not to due to the ppl saying they hated made up characters.

i think who cares if they say she's a mary sue! i apluad the fact that you wrote this story with your own character! becuase the ppl who say things like that will just ruin your creativity and the whole point of fanfiction is to write stories on what and who you want!

so keep up the good work, and dont let ppl who say she's a mary sue get to you.

mayby i'll write my story sometime.

goodluck!

Great job, I love your story!! :)