you are right it took you a ong time to update almost half a year i think!! neway if you are gonna describe more of jorends encounter's with callahan then you need to tup the rating... esoecally if they go into graphic detail...

Update soone rhtan you did b4 plkease!
Erytha

wow, i never thought of joren from this angle. i like it. please update soon!

please update soon. it's really good

this is short but not bad. you could possibly have someone come that Joren gets close to and mayb falls in love with, but cant get closse to bcz of his experiences... mayb have kel have a kid?? and then joren looks after the kid.. but those are jsut a few ideas!! pleaase update wuicker than b4! i didnt even rmember the story man! so i had to re read it! but yeh i want you to please update sooner!

This is a Wicked story! You could have Joren start to fall for a girl mayb, or have him start to open up to Kel, or have him fall in love with Kel...that would be amazing... all i can say is that you have to update soon coz i cant wait to read this!

I really really really like it! im confused though, not ur fault but who is kel's husband or neal? how long until th next chapter im looking foward to it! I really like this srory, I haven't found one like it, which is good, originality is really good. nice work and i can't wait (literally) till ur next chapter!

Perhaps he could emerge into the real world some more, and then something happens and he is all freaked out again. Or maybe he reads a book about Kel when she was a page and gets his memory back and then gets angry that she is treating him this way. She's empress, right? There ought to be a book or two about her.
Great job. Please keep going, I really like it.

Update please. I want to see where this goes.
Sarah

I've never read a story like this before; Joren acting this way is very different, but very interesting. Are you going to elaborate on what his old master did to him?

It's an honorable effort so far. You might want to tell how Kel ended up the empress, though, because it's driving me crazy. Back story is not a bad thing. But keep writing; what you have is very well written.

Please continue. This story is oddly attracting in a way. Very nice, though you may want to try paragrahphs.