cute fic

i love those sisters

God bless

Get a bloody beta and I might consider it. Sheesh.

The story seems really promising, and I'm looknig forward to the next chapter. BUT... (eh, there's always a but)

You've got several typos. It's spelled Bombalurina, and I have a problem with:

(Gold and Red that's what Tony named them even though their mother named them Demeter and Bombalaurina. He's a Human.)

After he called Bomb and Deme "Gold" and "Red", I'm sure everyone will know that those are their First Names. And it's spelled "couple".

(say it this waySar-rah)

Sar-rah. Got it. But I'd rather you put all the pronunciation stuff in the authors note that's either at the beginning or end of the chapter.

But besides that, it;s a very good story, and I'll be waiting for the next chapter.

Well it was good BUT you spelled Bombalurina wrong. Id like to see more chapters, i want to know where this is heading.