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Poetrygirl98 2008-08-06 . chapter 1
I love it! What an amazing plot line. Another daughter. Wow. :) Please continue!!
Sweet 15 2008-04-14 . chapter 1
Hi,
I really like this story.
TheInkSlayer 2007-12-29 . chapter 1
Don't get discouraged by the flames, it happens to the best of us. (Not that is should...) I like the idea, but you might want to seperate different days, and take everything slower. And make it more realistic, I mean who would just say "Goodnight" after she finds out she has a sister?!?! Oh yea, add more emotion.
Gabriella Janeway 2007-10-07 . chapter 1
I loved it please update soon.
LOTRlover1066 2007-06-08 . chapter 1
That was an interesting little twist. I like this so far. Keep going. I'm enjoying this. But, Daphne and Libby should go with Henry and Ian to meet Harper
The Sway Wannabe 2007-04-02 . chapter 1
This is great please continue it.
Christine Writer 2007-03-17 . chapter 1
i like
rhapsodyflower 2007-02-03 . chapter 1
Well...it's certainly creative...
julzxoxo 2007-01-24 . chapter 1
its happening all to quickly mabe slow it down a bit it would make it more interesting
Sarcasm 2007-01-21 . chapter 1
Ug, I can't stand it.

Scenario:
Libby:"Oh, honey, guess what!?! I just happened to sleep with you in time to have Daphne and, ah, what the hell? I magically had a daughter before that to! I know, I know, I should have told Daph, you know? But LOL that would be to in character! OH! By the way, hehe, she lives here now, instead of in NY where my parents never contacted me to inform me my daughter lived in England now, and, oh yeah, your first daughter never actually wanted to find you, she just happened to come here, and Ian, well, he wouldn't notice that last name and tell Daphne about it, no sir ee."
Henry: "Oh dear, that is a pickle."
Daphne: "I have a sister? Oh well, I'm to ditzy to care much, I'm going to skip off to my room now and complain to Ian, who is to stupid to realize his mate's gf has the same last name as my daddy!"
Ian: "...I know her!"

I'm sorry, that was cruel, but this was awful.
petersgurl91 2006-11-28 . chapter 1
it got my attention.
write some more!
constant reader 2006-10-19 . chapter 1
this is a really good story... keep it up please..
Waverider 2006-08-11 . chapter 1
O.K. so far, and has potential. Try to somehow seperate different days
you know me 2006-08-02 . chapter 1
This is terrible. Not the writing, but the whole premise.

You need to use paragraphs and properly separate segments.

This idea is ridiculous.
hayleylovesjoejonas 2006-07-29 . chapter 1
Well i like what a girl wants.. .so i want MORE! really good but countinue it!
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