What? No!(sobing) Aw...that's kinda too sad for me to handle, but nice story anyway (sniffle) ( "Rukia, can I borrow some tissue? I can't help crying~ **sniffle**)
But nice fanfic anyway **sniffle** really nice. But really sad...OH WHO CARES! It was really nice anyway ^^ Good job!

*sobs* Oh that one took the cake on angst. And the fact that it is so possible makes it only hurt worse -_-;; Use your powers for good not evil Brian1!! My mind can only take so much lol..

KSM

Awesome! I really like the way you transitioned from Ichigo to Hollow Ichigo, and the bit about being thirsty was just brilliant. So sad in the end...

pOoR rUkIa! y DyS aLwAyZ hAvE tO hApPeN 2 hEr? :( dIs StOrIe WuZ rEaLLy KrEePiE! >__

ehm...T_T traumatic...poor Rukia O_o

*stares at "End"* Um... no? That's such a tragic ending! Ah. Talk about history repeating itself for poor Rukia. I really hope you'll write more to this but then I don't too..cause it might seem stretched and corny or somethin. Either way, great story! I love your writing style. Take care!

OMG! That was so sad! Very well written, but sad!

-Ahria

omg, that was such a sad but great story

Huh? This is it? It came to an end quite abruptly to me. But other than that, this is quite well-written.
Anyway, keep writing. =)

OMGosh ! dis story made me teary !

good story *thumbs up*

OMG. Is this a one-shot? It would be nice to see Rukia searching for Ichigo in seiretei. It seems like he didn't actually die as a Hollow, did he?

Anyway, I really liked this fanfic and even if you decide to leave it as a one-chapter story I will definetely be waiting for more of your IchiRuki stories.
Bye!

I think you did a pretty good job here. Your use of language is consistent without any serious faults that cause me to jump up and down screaming like I do at so many stories. I enjoyed reading this bit a good deal. It was interesting, and pretty well-structured. I especially liked the moment at the end between normal Ichigo and Rukia. I think you did a very good job with that.

In terms of constructive criticism, 'cause I always like to offer that if I can, I'd say what I'd like to see more of here is a consistent voice for each character. Hollow Ichigo, for example, seems pretty much right on in some passages, while in others he strikes me as... overly academic. Rukia is pretty consistent throughout, and feels good. Ichigo is very good at the end, but toward the beginning I wasn't quite as sure. Character voice is more than just the words they say. Different characters perceive objects and events in different ways, and the language being used for Ichigo's perspective toward the beginning of the piece seemed, again, occasionally more academic than I imagine Ichigo's perceptions actually are. The bit about hoping his father wasn't awake is a good example of what I mean - this is the sort of perception I would expect from Ichigo, and expressed in language similar to that.

Again, I think you did a good job here, and I enjoyed reading your story. Don't take the above as a flame; I try to be critically helpful to everyone. Since I'm here to practice the craft, I figure if I'm providing feedback, helping other people do the same is the least I can offer.

Oh...wow...*wipes tears* That can't be happening again to dear Rukia! *cries some more* Soo sad, and yet, so well written. Will this truely be the end? Why must it be the end?! Oh, but it was so good. *cries* Awe...dear Rukia and Ichigo...
Great story

that was wonderful, i practically cried! it must be hard for rukia to have something like this happen to her two times~

anyhow, your writing is great and i hope to see more of your work

-makino

Whoa...angsty.Led Zep was not the right music for this.What an odd yet satisfying turn around, hope you write something that fills the lassitudic void you've created.