This Story is AWEsome!! Oh,and i like your idea of giving him all those abilities and jutsu.Another thing is that this story flows like water flows along the sea.

interesting start. too bad this was dropped a long time ago.

good story please update some more i like it

great story

a most intresting story, bloodlines given but not in the focus.
and the kitsune that naruto ran into is intruigen. i simply gotta read more of this.

“Arigatou, Mayuri-san! Orewa Uzumaki Naruto desu. Yoroshiku onegai shimasu!” The secretary’s heart melted as she saw her boyish grin. “Uhn! Yoroshiku, Uzumaki-san.”

what was the point of this? you didn't even put in a translation for this. were you trying to impress us? pick a language. if you want to write complete sentences in japanese, then go to that language section of the site. other than that, the only other complaint is the constant author notes in the middle of the chapters. for one, they are not allowed. two, they interrupt the flow of the story. it's hard to get into the story when it keeps getting interrupted.

great story good plot

good

is kanae going to come back later or was her appearance just random and unimportant? nd if this is specific for naruto, ur switching scenes, WAY too much. plus, the other scenes seem pointless

Epic! I haven't read a excellent fanfic like that in a while! Kudos to you my friend. I am amazed you were able to write so much about all that had happened there when Naruto graduated... Me, I would have allready done the time skip by now, but then it would of looked like crap! I give this fanfic a rating of 11/10!

EPIC WIN!

Cool Chapter. I am going to continue reading the fanfic. But I hope that you are still updating considering I hate when really good fanfics are written but then stop all of a sudden. Well anyways On to the next chapter.

cool cool please update soon as Ihave nothing els to read

This is an interesting and wonderful fanfiction. I liked it a lot!! Please up-date soon Shikaku-sama!

Hmm,
I liked how your story started and even some of the concepts you introduced but I think you might be taking techniques in so many directions that a reader will get lost in the technicalities (that does not even include the excess scenes like Team 4's test that I am not sure if you will even touch on any of the pre-genin again in future plot.

One thought I think that might allow your Naruto to advance his training is that ninjas gain the memories of their Kage Bunshins when dispelled though your Naruto might not notice that until after the Hokages help him clean up his mind. In cannon I don't think cannon Naruto noticed this until post time skip but it would make sense to use it to go through the technique scrolls so as that Naruto does not have to waste all his training time reading one scroll after another. The few fanfiction stories that use this tend to use the idea of there being to much mental strain if they are dismissed all at once but carefully a few at a time and Naruto is more than capable of extending his knowledge base. Another use is that clones can work on chakra control but when it comes to muscle training and what not the original ninja needs to do all the work themselves but Lee's observation about the limited chakra capacity of the clones makes me think...

Do you think that even if Naruto himself is not able to refine his control enough to use medical techniques that with their reduced capacity and finer control that his shadow clones might be able to?

I do like your doujutsu histories and I was sort of thinking what potentials the other bijuu might provide, for ichibi his obviously sand sight (think Garaa's sand eye thingy) while the nibi no nekomata might have something like death sight (not cannon but there are a few stories where the neko is the guardian of Shingami and has powers of spirits and necromancy, so those that inherit her eyes might be able to see dead people(6th sense) or even the moment of a persons death) the sanbi (turtle like creature) powers unknown but I was thinking maybe something like barrier eyes (able to warp any element to form a shell of protection) 4, 6, 7, and 9 are worked out 5 I am not even sure what type of animal maybe panda or something but following the other bloodlines I think 5 would be something like sealing eyes (able to look at copy and break down seals like what is on Naruto's stomach or his locks as well as how to manipulate and improve them) while I think 8 would be serpent of snake so maybe like a hydra and the eyes would be snake poison eyes (able to track, analyze, and counter chemical compounds sch as poisons and other drugs)...

Sorry just an idea and the colors could work out them selves.

Please update soon,
~Reflections
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i like this fanfic, i hope u update soon.
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